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Unrelenting

How does my body This flesh that withholds my soul,, manage to bear the weight from the chains that have been embedded upon my bequeathing heart? Where does one hide the pain that is encrusted upon these eyes that are dreary and now fail to sleep? Why cant my mind acquit, my heart adrift, my skin ache for the touch of another? Does it have to be me that has to live with this night, because happiness is the other side of this mirror? h

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James Peranteau

Date: 5/13/2020 9:00:00 AM

stunning write young poet....you need no such thing (constructive criticism) it cause the artist to veer to each their (the critiquer's) visions, theories, ect.....you will sit and ponder the critiquer's approach to writing skills, thus stymying your Cerebrum's engram from spilling 'pon slip; your real! just spill, i'll read...i love hanging with artists, particularly; writers...have a great journey...much love, james

David Waldrop

Date: 2/2/2019 12:26:00 AM

Words of flowing Beauty. Reading this poetry I hear a heart that searching for the understanding of self and love within existence. To know and understand the heart while searching for the soulmate promised by Destiny. This poetry speaks of the sadness endured while waiting for fate. A specific sadness I see every time I look in the mirror.

Paul Callus

Date: 10/17/2018 2:38:00 AM

Your words reflect doubts, unanswered questions and the longing for what you find hard to attain. Yet, you know that behind the mirror there are solutions...one just needs to dare more, to take a few steps into un-trodden paths, to sail uncharted seas. I love the way how you express your feelings, H. A very worthy poem with which to make your debut on Soup! ~ Regards // paul

Susan Ashley

Date: 10/16/2018 4:11:00 PM

Wow! Your poem expresses profound and poignant emotions with such sad beauty. I was captivated by every line of your aching imagery and heartbreaking introspection, Mockingbird. Superb poetry! Great title too.. Warmest wishes.. ~Susan

Poet Tacito

Date: 3/31/2018 6:34:00 PM

It's a shame I didn't see this poem sooner. I really can relate to this in many ways. This was resounding, powerful & full of wisdom, hidden in between the lines, that we all could use more than ever.

Rizwan Saleem

Date: 3/30/2018 5:21:00 PM

Very well written , great work

Mockingbird Stevenson
Date: 3/31/2018 8:08:00 AM

Thanks Rizwan, appreciate the support. H

Gregory Richard Barden

Date: 3/23/2018 8:02:00 PM

Congratulations on your win, Mockingbird - keep up the great work! Rife with heartache and feeling - I thoroughly enjoyed this! :-) <3

Mockingbird Stevenson
Date: 3/23/2018 9:20:00 PM

Big thanks Gregory!

Line Gauthier

Date: 3/20/2018 7:41:00 PM

A lot of emotion in this beautiful little poem. Beautifully executed, Mockingbird.

Mockingbird Stevenson
Date: 3/22/2018 3:01:00 AM

I see similar emotional boldness in your pieces. Great release and even nicer to know other people out there shared mixed pain

Poet Destroyer A

Date: 12/7/2015 7:32:00 PM

Mockingbird, WELCOME to poetry soup. I hope you have fun with this wonderful community. You'll find many friendly poets who are ready to support and give positive feedback. I will enjoy following you and your poetry :) We are Lucky To Have you. Enjoy Poetry Soup:) Your New Poet Friend @-> LINDA <-@

Mockingbird Stevenson
Date: 12/13/2015 8:02:00 PM

Hi there, Thankyou for your warm welcome. Have a lovely day!

Njeri Hunjeri

Date: 12/3/2015 2:28:00 PM

wow this is very deep. I loved how you used the words and the imagery. a very great poem. I enjoyed it. welcome to poetry soup Mockingbird. #7

Mockingbird Stevenson
Date: 12/13/2015 8:03:00 PM

Thankyou for your feedback! Lovely!

John Fleming

Date: 12/2/2015 6:13:00 AM

Interesting piece of prose you have penned here. My best regards! :) john

Mockingbird Stevenson
Date: 12/2/2015 5:16:00 PM

Thankyou John, I am looking forward to reading more of your work for inspiration today!

Pandita Sietesantos

Date: 12/1/2015 3:47:00 PM

Hi Mockingbird, this is such an excellent first posting that I enjoyed reading! I look forward to reading more of your work! Welcome to PoetrySoup and best wishes as you continue to churn out wonderful poetic pieces! Warmest regards and a score of 7! Pandita

Mockingbird Stevenson
Date: 12/1/2015 8:56:00 PM

Thank you Pandita, I appreciate your support and look forward to learning more from your inspiring poetry! Thanks again for reading x

Skat A

Date: 12/1/2015 5:24:00 AM

Hi, Mockingbird Stevenson, Welcome to Poetry Soup. It will be a delight to read and become familiar with your poems in the future. As for now, I will greet you with the same smile others passed when I first joined the soup. Wishing you and your poetry the best. I hope you get to meet all the nice poets around here STARTING with me- SKAT :-) Please drop a hello and tell me a little about yourself if you wish. I would like to be your newest poetry soup "FRIEND" Hugs* SKAT

Mockingbird Stevenson
Date: 12/1/2015 8:57:00 PM

Hi there, thanks for the lovely warm welcome I look forward to our poetry journey together. X