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Below is the poem entitled Unfair. which was written by poet Rachel W. Please feel free to comment on this poem. However, please remember, PoetrySoup is a place of encouragement and growth.

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She raised her hand to her mouth,
and the phone crashed to the floor.
Her hands shook as she grabbed her keys
and headed for the door.

On the open road she panicked.
How could this be real?
She pondered so many questions,
while behind the wheel.

She pulled up beside the scene,
just a few blocks from her home.
Her jaw dropped as she scanned the area,
He was lying there all alone.

She sat down beside him,
placed his head upon her lap.
She looked up to the heavens,
as if looking at a map.

Blood trickled from his forehead,
his eyes vacant, no longer bold.
His body lie in her arms,
lifeless and so cold.

The police, they came to tell her,
it was time to leave.
But all she could do was watch his chest,
wishing he would breathe.

She was informed of the cause,
of this horrific act.
Her son had been driving under the influence,
this was a known fact.

After all the speeches she had given,
“Call a cab, or stay over night”
or, “I’ll pick you up anytime”
None of this seemed to be quite right.

His sister left without a brother,
His father without a son.
Please take a good hard look,
At what drinking & driving has done.

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  1. Date: 6/22/2010 1:07:00 PM
    Wow! What a powerful message. great poem, sad story. Thanks for sharing.

  1. Date: 6/18/2010 7:31:00 AM
    Rachel, you hit this one head on.....Sad but very true about the concequences of drinking and griving....Great Write. I pray that all will take heed to this very important message. And Thanks for stopping and expressing words of encouragement. Be Bless Patricia

  1. Date: 6/17/2010 5:21:00 PM
    A fine message you have conveyed thro'the poem and summing up in the last four lines.

  1. Date: 6/17/2010 5:13:00 PM
    Strong message, yes some should be aware for this type of stuff happening around us, very sad write...P.D.

  1. Date: 6/17/2010 3:38:00 PM
    well written poem!! tough subject and so sad.

  1. Date: 6/17/2010 3:34:00 PM
    Sad write about something that happens way too much...I hope just a topic and not real life..Keep the creative pen flowing..Sara