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Undying Question

A tin of chocolates The sun slowly retreating In beautiful flame A glance in secret The firm push of resolution Butterflies dancing Girlie smile The light of welcome At last --"Will you be mine?"

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Andrea Dietrich

Date: 2/16/2013 8:03:00 PM

Congrats on the winners circle. I thought yours was a very well crafted set of haiku!!

Connie Gildersleeve

Date: 2/16/2013 5:17:00 PM

Congrats on your win Isalah. An awesome poem my friend. Connie

Audrey Haick

Date: 2/16/2013 3:40:00 PM

Congratulations on another fine win, Isaiah!

Poet Destroyer A

Date: 2/16/2013 1:59:00 PM

ISAIAH, thank you for the support, and fun loving haiku + questionku... Congrats, with all my heart :-) LINDA

Sara Kendrick

Date: 2/10/2013 2:07:00 PM

Enjoyed reading your passionate work..Very well written..If for a contest, it should be in the winners' list..Thanks for stopping by..Sara

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 2/9/2013 11:17:00 AM

so here is your really sweet side. I am liking it mucho!! love that title too.

Charmaine Chircop

Date: 2/9/2013 8:49:00 AM

No girlie can resist chocolates and poetry.Im sure she d say yes.At last valentines virus completely got ya cowboy :).zz Lovely poem full of rpmance and churning butterflies.tmfvs

Charmaine Chircop

Date: 2/9/2013 8:45:00 AM

No girlie can resists chocolates and poetry so im sure she would say yes.Dont fotget a rose sssh:)..Lovely valentine virus..It got ya at last Cowboy:-$ zB-).Very romantic valentine poem and wonderful butterflies churning reminded me of my teenage days..tmfvs

Ilene Bauer

Date: 2/8/2013 2:15:00 PM

this is very lovely and i like the title you've chosen...