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Underwater

Im under water and it feels like a slaughter the killing of my precious air day dreaming that someones there Hoping and praying for anyone To come around and be the one to rescue me, but I am alone My soul took off from my body, it has flown from this deoxygenated world to mine I am now feeling shivers down my spine I feel the trembling of my lungs The absence of the life my body longs for and craves, the life it needs I am frozen in time as my nose bleeds My stomach fills with acid, water begins to sink into my airless lungs i think people are yelling with cut off tongues theyre muted, they cant be heard I begin to feel weightless like a bird I think Im starting to drown I continue to sink and go down deeper under this water that feels like a slaughter

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Date: 5/21/2016 10:13:00 AM
Marcos Estrada, welcome to poetry soup, well penned. Enjoyed reading your thoughts and words today. *SKAT*
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Date: 4/6/2016 5:37:00 AM
Hi Marcos, Nice first post. Welcome to poetry soup.Wish a successful journey ahead..........hugs
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Date: 4/5/2016 4:52:00 PM
Marcos, Welcome to Poetry soup, I hope you enjoy the community. Here, you will find friendly poets who enjoy supporting one another. I myself, enjoy reading and commenting those who want to be read. The only time I give constructive criticism is when a poet desires it. However, if for some reason the poem is not my field I will guide you to someone who is more qualified than I. Stop by and read one of my poems if you like. My poems are not perfect, but I have a feeling you might like one. I encourage you to check out the contest page and read to receive comments. Tell me a little about your poetic skills if you like. It will be my pleasure to follow and read every poem you post from here on :) We are Lucky To Have you. Your New Poet Friend @-> LINDA <-@
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Date: 4/5/2016 2:36:00 PM
Amassing verses , feelings and thoughts in the hands of hope. Congrat.
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