Unaware

The sky is slowly melting as the sun blisters through, The forecast is capping near one hundred twenty-two. Birds stopped chirping, squirrels left without a clue, Water trickles slowly, no trace of brilliant blue, Oh such loving grandfather with inventions fresh and new, Why were you so unaware of what global warming would do? .......................................... Form: Monorhyme Written: 07/14/2016 Contest: One Stanza - One Only Sponsor: Broken Wing Results: 5th Place

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Line Gauthier

Date: 2/23/2018 9:03:00 AM

Good poem, Jesse. Well done.

Kim Merryman

Date: 7/23/2016 9:02:00 PM

Jesse, this is good! A smooth flowing monorhyme that asks a valid question. Congrats on your placement! Blessings!

Jesse Day
Date: 7/30/2016 1:42:00 PM

Thank you for reading and your comments! Jesse

Sandra Haight

Date: 7/21/2016 6:30:00 AM

A well-written Monorhyme, Jesse, and your message so full of wisdom. Congratulations on your placement in the contest. 7 Hugs, Sandra

Jesse Day
Date: 7/30/2016 1:43:00 PM

Thanks, Sandra - Jesse

Paul Callus

Date: 7/20/2016 5:20:00 PM

This is unique and beautiful, Jesse! Excellent use of the monorhyme form, too. Congratulations on such a worthy win! // paul

Jesse Day
Date: 7/30/2016 1:44:00 PM

Thank you, Paul!

Kai Michael Neumann

Date: 7/20/2016 3:01:00 PM

Congratulations. One stanza only and so much in it. I think your grandfather might well enjoy this too. Best wishes.

Jesse Day
Date: 7/30/2016 1:45:00 PM

Thanks - maybe so. Thanks for reading - Jesse

Jan Allison

Date: 7/20/2016 2:27:00 PM

We areso much more aware these days Jesse yet look at the state of the world - man made destruction:-( congrats on your win:-) hugs jan xx

Jesse Day
Date: 7/30/2016 1:45:00 PM

Thank you, Jan!

Bl Devnath

Date: 7/20/2016 1:17:00 PM

Congrats on your beautiful win with this beautiful poem my lovely friend. Loved always, bl

Sunita U.D Palawon

Date: 7/20/2016 11:19:00 AM

Congrats on your high place. This is wonderful. I enjoyed it. Sunita.

Eve Roper

Date: 7/19/2016 12:35:00 PM

Jesse, very well written Monorhyme one that Broken Wing will truly enjoy. good luck in the contest. Hugs and thank you for visiting my poem.

Connie Marcum Wong

Date: 7/19/2016 4:29:00 AM

Wow,this is brilliant Jesse! It defines how unaware our forefathers were of cause and effect. I hope this receives a top placement in the contest! 7 ; )

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 7/17/2016 5:17:00 PM

I am on my cell phone. This is more hellish than global warming!!

Jesse Day
Date: 7/17/2016 5:28:00 PM

LOL! That's funny!

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 7/15/2016 5:40:00 PM

grandfather did not really know the dangers at that time! WE have so much more knowledge today and still nothing gets accomplished. what a world!!

Andrea Dietrich
Date: 7/17/2016 5:16:00 PM

I am grandma now. Not grandpa. Haha. Well. Most of us are not into science. It is too bad those smart guys were not promoted by the media or something!!

Jesse Day
Date: 7/16/2016 10:33:00 AM

Joseph Fourier first suggested in the 1820s that gases in the Earth’s atmosphere trap heat and help keep the planet warm, coining the term greenhouse effect. Physicist John Tyndall later extended the theory by identifying that gases, such as carbon dioxide and methane, were responsible for the warming. It was logical to assume the possibility that more heat is trapped with the huge increase of emissions. My question is not of blame - it is why weren't these issues important enough to address in the "modern world" of the early 20th century before the damage was done? For me, this is the biggest lesson I learned from "grandfather". Will the positive effect of future invention be complete - tested with all theories of cause/effect? Sorry, grandfather, I ramble! LOL!

Andrea Dietrich
Date: 7/16/2016 9:51:00 AM

I think my grandpa was a lot older than yours was. haha!! Believe me, when mine died, this issue was hardly a blip on the radar!

Jesse Day
Date: 7/15/2016 6:23:00 PM

"Grandfather" was aware of pollution and the greenhouse effect but was a bit cavalier about dealing with it. I am not blaming him, I simply asked the question, how could he not be aware of the dangers? I agree concerning what we know now and what we don't do to remedy problems. Thanks for your visit and your comments! Jesse

Anne-Lise Andresen

Date: 7/14/2016 1:09:00 PM

- We learn .... we understand today (2016) ..... grandfather did not understand ..... save the earth - A great poem, Jesse - Good luck in the contest - hugs // Anne-Lise :)

Jesse Day
Date: 7/14/2016 6:54:00 PM

Thank you for reading and your eloquent comment! Jesse