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Treachery

I cannot say if I will stay I will not share my pure despair I won’t reveal through this ordeal I do not care you’re unaware I don’t believe I can relieve I won’t explain the endless pain You never thought you would get caught And now I’m strained to wax or wane (In Iambic Tetrameter) 4/28/2016

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Reason A. Poteet

Date: 5/18/2016 8:08:00 PM

This says much in a negative sort of way. Not really sure about preterition yet. Enjoyed this though and love the title. Congratulations, Lukas.

Lin Lane

Date: 5/18/2016 11:34:00 AM

Great internal and ending rhyme, Lukas. A difficult feat but well worth the effort.

Sara Kendrick

Date: 5/18/2016 9:56:00 AM

I like the way that you went about this one..Way to go..Thanks for the entry in my contest..Congrats on your win..Sara

Teddy Kimathi

Date: 5/18/2016 4:09:00 AM

Greetings Lukas. Congrats for your placement with this wonderful piece!! ;-)

Constance La France

Date: 4/29/2016 11:10:00 PM

Lukas, very good for the contest, best of luck, I am trying to learn iambic pentameter, oh my, there seems to be no rhythm in my head ~

Lukas Ficklin
Date: 4/30/2016 9:25:00 AM

Thx my friend! I am learning the meters and beats myself but it's fun to play around with it. You certainly do have skills though... Amazing writes and contest wins!!