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In my bed, time is sleepy stretching, for the Wind I wait....

Copyright © | Year Posted 2010




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Date: 1/15/2011 1:40:00 PM
gentle..it is senyru because it is about a person not the wind, both forms do not use capitalization and neither uses a title, line 2 1 "p" in sleepy...put the subject in line 1, the action in lines 2 & 3, is the subject time, if so put it in line 1 & the you stretching in the bed in line 2 at the end of the second line you put --- to indicate a slight shift in thought Light & Love
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Date: 6/1/2010 9:31:00 AM
Great write that makes me feel the mood of nighttime and the sighing of the wind that hums me to sleep...Keep the creative pen flowing..Sara
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Date: 5/29/2010 9:40:00 AM
2 "ee' 's line 2 interesting write! Light & Love
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Date: 5/26/2010 6:20:00 PM
Nice images with deep meaning
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Date: 5/26/2010 3:00:00 PM
Great poem. I loved it!
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Date: 5/26/2010 2:32:00 PM
i wish i could write in such few words and mean so much.. i enjoyed
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