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Through the Storm (Trois Par Huit)

drenching rains breaths mist on cool glass panes a rub wipes clear a circular patch watching water in rivulets run from the thatch of the cottage next door, then our grateful eyes catch sight of young fledglings, huddled in form dry ‘neath shrubs, safe and warm through the storm
*** for Jared Pickett's Trois par Huit contest We watched two fledgling blue **** emerge from their nest box in the garden on Saturday, still unable to fly properly. We watched for hours as the parents brought tiny caterpillars and grubs to feed them. Then the heavens opened, thankfully they found shelter :)

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Date: 8/11/2010 11:42:00 AM
I can see the images I see painted on porcelain plates. A twitchers joy they would be. There's a humbling in this poetry. Humans looking out to life in a different way to nature >> James
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Date: 6/22/2010 8:53:00 AM
Ahh...lovely scene. Lovely write.
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Date: 6/15/2010 10:57:00 AM
such a charming image!Light & Love
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Date: 6/2/2010 1:58:00 PM
You're very welcome Sharon--you totally deserved it ^_^ hugs back & I'm really going to sleep now...ttys :)
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Date: 6/2/2010 1:03:00 PM
I knew it! This little gem is SO a winner. Congrats. BG
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Date: 6/2/2010 9:11:00 AM
^_^!!!! I knew it!! I wasn't surprised you took top prize for this amazing piece Sharon--soo happy for you! Enjoy that honor :)
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Date: 6/2/2010 8:36:00 AM
Congratulations my dear for taking the #1 spot in this extremely difficult form to judge... Pat yourself on the back, you deserve it....... :JP]
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Date: 6/1/2010 2:11:00 PM
wow, you got one awesome trois par Huit from that little visual experience, Sharon! I will feel really amazed if I get a top place in this contest. I have seen way too many good ones. How will he ever decide? LUv, andrea
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Date: 6/1/2010 6:58:00 AM
Lovely piece..What a nice job you did with this form..I found it very difficult. Thank you for your comments on the pie piece..huckleberries are smaller than a blueberry and very tart...smiles.. BG
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Date: 5/31/2010 9:57:00 PM
Wow, this is enchanting...you have such a beautiful style! Excellent writing. kisses Emily
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Date: 5/31/2010 4:44:00 PM
I just loved this, Sharon ^_^...it's raining right now over here and reading your lovely entry is perfect :) I could really picture those baby birds--really love how your first and last lines just link together and I really enjoyed the story in between--I just know this will well in the contest :)
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Date: 5/31/2010 12:05:00 PM
Such a beauty,I'm glad Frank led us here..Charma.
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Date: 5/31/2010 7:59:00 AM
this is another beauty!! A winning poem, no doubt....so lovely to see this through your eyes! Thanks! ~ Carrie
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Date: 5/31/2010 7:36:00 AM
Very beautiful Sharon!This feels to me as the winner indeed!! Thanks for spotting the type-o~~~~Rick
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Date: 5/31/2010 6:54:00 AM
What a lovely image of the birds, Sharon. It must have been fun to watch them find the strength to fly! Love, Carolyn
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Date: 5/31/2010 6:22:00 AM
Nice imagery in this poem, Sharon! Ana a happy ending! Tank you for your comment and good luck in the contest...Gert
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Date: 5/31/2010 5:52:00 AM
This is excellent. I like the imagery in this poem. The words are well formulated and flow very well. Water is always cleansing. Great job! Joseph
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Date: 5/31/2010 4:46:00 AM
Nice one Sharon, the best luck to u in the contest,,IRMA
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