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This Was You

Crippled tears fall unnoticed, unwanted In a shadowy room that's dimly lit, By a fading, flickering, suicide candle Grasping in vain for that last broken straw, were the last silver lining of hope refuses to surface. At last a solid decision is made for the good of all, To become one with the cold chill of fall, As the roaring freight train in the brain makes its final stop. The bullet slips effortlessly into the waiting chamber, like the last sperm penetrating a waiting womb. The climactic end to an invisible existance, and in one instance, that last glance in the dusty cracked mirror tells the truth, This was you.

Copyright © | Year Posted 2013




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Date: 5/3/2013 9:13:00 PM
Ok, you are a very mysterious writer, you allow each reader to never want to leave your site, very interesting. Hope one day you will have the opportunity to publish your famous poems. Well done. Terry xo
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Carl Fraser
Date: 5/3/2013 9:23:00 PM
Thanks for reading Terry, im a sailor and im away alot, sometimes its dark and depressing, but its theraputic for me to write it all down, i prpmise i will read more of your work , im on limited time out here and i do not always have a signal, blessings Carl
Date: 4/15/2013 10:17:00 AM
Carl, this can be me... your poem has very deep meaning. one is pierced through life... until the right doors open. changing life away from the chambers... that way this can not be me... always...Linda
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Date: 3/30/2013 12:43:00 PM
No matter how well we hide our feelings, the truth will eventually come out. - A very good poem Carl. - oxox / / Anne-Lise :)
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