The Sands of Time

Story of my life Written in the shifting sands Gone with the ebb tide

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Hgarvey Daniel Esquire

Date: 2/7/2010 7:43:00 PM

Dear Barbara, This Is an Awesome Write but I don't like what it says "AGAIN" LOVE YOU ALWAYS and FOREVER...HG

Date: 2/7/2010 4:04:00 PM

What a insightful poem. So much said in just three lines. Thank you for sharing them with us. Karen

Michael Jordan

Date: 2/7/2010 12:19:00 PM

Barbara, how have you been? This is a wonderful Senryu that is full of depth. God bless you hon, YF4L, mj

Sean Kelly

Date: 1/31/2010 1:38:00 AM

Dead write , Babara ( sorry right ) . Where the hell is King Neptune , when he is needed ?? I know exactly what you mean , but you said in in 3 perfect Senryu lines ....

Carolyn Devonshire

Date: 1/30/2010 7:57:00 PM

We watch life slipping away one grain of sand at a time, just like staring at an hourglass. Beautiful yet sad image in this haiku, LNC. Love, Carolyn

Constance La France

Date: 1/30/2010 7:37:00 PM

In a second, it is the past....so much said in a few words...

Carrie Richards

Date: 1/30/2010 7:35:00 PM

It often feels this way.....like the days have disappeared so quickly with the tide...and along with the sands of time...a bit of ourselves....just drift away. Well done! Carrie