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The Rotten

Analysis read—and wronged—and pulled
Lulled into our idealistic mess
Words no longer ours but hung distress
Farced in carnality—they are ruled

Soundness remains what we will believe 
And all else is but tethered nonsense
Clinched tightly in unfriendly absence
Overcome in overwrought relief

The judges judge on behalf of tongue
When ears and eyes close achingly tight
And perhaps in woe we find them right
For witches sought and bound must be hung!

Lower than the softened dirt that cures
Where worms in halves blindly come to eat
The higher crush with tormented feat
And the suns scorch what is left of hers

Answers never tried—and cured to hide
They look to superior sources
The rotten are the strongest forces
Ripened and toughened with bequeathed pride

-Iambic Tetrameter
Contest: Metrical verse
Sponsor: Giorgio Veneto
Laura Breidenthal

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  1. Date: 9/23/2013 5:41:00 AM
    Congrats on your winning work..Way to go!!!Sara

  1. Date: 9/22/2013 7:43:00 PM
    Hi Laura, nice Metrical verse win... luv~Linda

  1. Date: 9/21/2013 11:54:00 PM
    Congratulations on your win with a great metrical piece. Love, Joyce

  1. Date: 9/21/2013 10:49:00 PM
    So great and powerful write. Thank you so much for sharing my dear friend Laura! Congratulations on your super win! And, have a great wkend! love lots and big hugs, Leonora

  1. Date: 9/20/2013 11:56:00 PM
    Congrats on winning the place in the contest, Laura

  1. Date: 9/20/2013 8:32:00 PM
    very unique poem...enjoyed the flow of this one as well as the content...congrats on your win :)

  1. Date: 9/9/2013 11:10:00 PM
    Riveting piece. A beautifully ominous & piercing writing. Damn fine job!

  1. Date: 9/9/2013 11:46:00 AM
    I love the edge and raw force of this one. To be judged and judge and unfairly seems to be a human trait that is flawed. As always I am in awe. ~Kilmer

  1. Date: 9/9/2013 11:01:00 AM
    This is cool. I liked your rhyme scheme and your wording. Really enjoyed it; well done! :)

  1. Date: 9/9/2013 6:38:00 AM got that right. The whole way of things anymore is rotten....mostly. You have the pen to capture it.

  1. Date: 9/9/2013 4:03:00 AM
    .... we have to watch our tongue ..... keep silent and think .... remember that witches were burned over an open fire ..well done, Laura! - oxox // Anne-Lise :)

    Breidenthal Avatar Laura Breidenthal
    Date: 9/9/2013 4:55:00 AM Block poet from commenting on your poetry

    Very true, Anne. Stay sweet. :) ~Laura
  1. Date: 9/8/2013 8:42:00 PM
    Your poetry has a sharp edge of truth to it, enjoyed reading your verse tonight, and your comment my page was heart felt, hugs xxx

    Breidenthal Avatar Laura Breidenthal
    Date: 9/9/2013 4:55:00 AM Block poet from commenting on your poetry

    I appreciate your visit,Mystic Rose.:) ~Laura