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The River Charles

The River Charles Brackishly she leaves, yet still remains, motionless in movements rhapsody timeless witness to a revolutions birthing a tender refuge in the heart of city life. Water to assuage new freedoms fire esplanade, overtures The River Charles for Andrea Dietrich contest Choose Your Favorite Body

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Faye Gibson

Date: 6/16/2014 9:11:00 PM

Really like this, John. Water to assuage new freedoms fire... Congratulations.

John Lawless
Date: 6/17/2014 3:49:00 PM

Thank you Faye. At many levels the "revolution" continues.

Sara Kendrick

Date: 6/16/2014 11:40:00 AM

I may copy and paste congrats but I have read your work and find it of exceptional quality. Sara

John Lawless
Date: 6/17/2014 3:42:00 PM

Sara, an honor to have you cut and paste my poem and thank you for your kind comment.

Carolyn Devonshire

Date: 6/15/2014 6:57:00 PM

Dear John, I love the way you capture the historical events this river has witnessed. A magnificent write. Congratulations on your win! Love, Carolyn

John Lawless
Date: 6/17/2014 3:45:00 PM

Thank you Carolyn

Joyce Johnson

Date: 6/15/2014 3:29:00 PM

I agree this could have been much higher were it not for the syllable slip. Congratulations. Love, Joyce

John Lawless
Date: 6/17/2014 3:43:00 PM

Alas I often write better than I count. Thank you Joyce for your support and comments.

Paul Callus

Date: 6/15/2014 7:55:00 AM

A beautiful write which could easily have placed higher, John. Congrats on your win. // paul

Joseph May

Date: 6/15/2014 6:35:00 AM

Congrats on a fine win John

John Lawless
Date: 6/17/2014 3:47:00 PM

Joseph, thanks for checking in again, appreciate the comments.

Dr. Upma A. Sharma

Date: 6/15/2014 5:46:00 AM

John that's a wonderful poem indeed ! Congrats on great win !

John Lawless
Date: 6/17/2014 3:41:00 PM

Thanks for your support.

Dr.Ram Mehta

Date: 6/15/2014 1:34:00 AM

Fine choice of the water of the body and fine win. Congrats, John

John Lawless
Date: 6/17/2014 3:40:00 PM

easy choice, I spend countless hours on the river fishing and kayaking

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 6/15/2014 1:09:00 AM

Dang, another one that was so good but I put an HM for using too many syllables in your last line. The title and last line were to be only three syllables. I wonder. could you have said Charles River?? Anyway, congrats and thanks for trying this form.

John Lawless
Date: 6/15/2014 8:14:00 AM

Alas Andrea, my mistake is the result of my fishing buddy who always announces, Jacques Cousteau like, as we enter the river: "Phillippe and I will now enter The River Charles in search of the elusive Boston Bass". Appreciate the placement in spite of my error. John

Joseph May

Date: 5/31/2014 10:41:00 PM

Great write John...I like the 2nd line...best wishe in the contest