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Written after re-reading the fable ‘the tortoise and the hare’ … I thought I would give the story a little updating! A racehorse and an old donkey challenged one another to a race ‘I’m sure to win’ said the racehorse with a smirk upon her face She said ‘Don’t bother lining up you stupid little ass You should stay in the pasture, munching on the grass’ The old donkey gave the racehorse a knowing look She’d met her sort before – one day she’ll write a book They lined up at the starting line; the starter read some rules The racehorse just ignored them saying ‘rules are just for fools’ So the racehorse shot off like a bullet being fired from a gun Determined to win the race she thought she’d have some fun Dashing far ahead of donkey she’d soon reach the winner’s sign Donkey was trotting slowly; she was lagging so very far behind Racehorse was so far in front she was convinced she’d win the race But if she’d listened to all the rules she wouldn’t soon fall from grace For the starter said that the last one past the post who would be the winner So donkey stopped to munch some grass, as she wanted to eat some dinner When donkey finally passed the finishing line she was really happy Racehorse was crestfallen to lose the race, and she got very snappy The moral of this story is first past the post doesn’t always win And if you are a sore loser you’ll just have to take it on the chin! 12~07~16

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Date: 12/11/2016 5:57:00 PM
Loved the rewrite Jan. It is so true that if you don't listen to what's being said you will miss out on what is really important.
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Date: 12/12/2016 4:52:00 PM
So true Edward:-) hugs jan xx
Date: 12/9/2016 9:29:00 PM
this is so funny, Jan, love it
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Date: 12/11/2016 12:50:00 AM
Thanks Eve:-):-):-) hugs Jan xx
Date: 12/8/2016 3:04:00 PM
Got a chuckle at the rewritten old fable..Sometimes being slow has its benefits..Thanks for all the visit to my work and taking time to comment..Sara
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Date: 12/8/2016 4:54:00 PM
Glad you enjoyed Sara:-) hugs jan xx
Date: 12/8/2016 8:55:00 AM
GOTD! (for 12-7, I forgot to award one yesterday and I already gave Alexis one for today;-) Huggeruns! ~ j
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Date: 12/8/2016 8:59:00 AM
aww thanks John:-) hugs jan xx
Date: 12/8/2016 6:38:00 AM
A very nice story Jan...enjoyed
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Date: 12/8/2016 7:26:00 AM
Thanks Joseph:-):-):-) hugs jan xx
Date: 12/7/2016 10:12:00 PM
Oh I love this one Jan, very good and funny because I could just imagine a racehorse and a donkey lined up and it is true, first past the post is not always a winner, thank you for the visit to my page and take care.......Vera
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Date: 12/8/2016 1:02:00 AM
Thanks so much for dropping by Vera:-) love to you and Peter:-):-) hugs jan xx
Date: 12/7/2016 5:41:00 PM
There ain't nothing like a little ass to make a fool out of a stud. Love your humor, Jan:)
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Date: 12/7/2016 5:45:00 PM
ha ha ha love that comment Daniel:-) hugs Jan xx
Date: 12/7/2016 3:02:00 PM
Reading rules often makes the difference between exhilaration and letdown! Was your take oh and old fabled based on Aesop or La Fontaine? Enjoyablen read.Thanks for stopping by, and yes, our judges and other high officials are not beneath naughty behavior. / M
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Date: 12/7/2016 3:05:00 PM
Yes, not following rules or instructions can let us down:-) I read Aesop's fable and did my own version lol :-) hugs Jan xx
Date: 12/7/2016 12:49:00 PM
ohh, we need to listen and and be a sport... wonderful rhyme with a wise lesson learned, jan!..huggs and soupie!
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Date: 12/7/2016 1:58:00 PM
Thanks Nette I had fun re writing the old tale lol:-) hugs jan xx
Date: 12/7/2016 11:10:00 AM
- I love the moral of this poem, Jan !!! - Fun to read, but an important point :) - hugs // Anne-Lise :)
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Date: 12/7/2016 11:11:00 AM
Thanks Anne Lise:-) hugs Jan xx
Date: 12/7/2016 10:39:00 AM
Glad I didn't make a wager...sometimes I just skim the rules...hence all my n/a's (neighs)...lol
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Date: 12/7/2016 11:03:00 AM
LOL great comment Tim:-) hugs jan xx
Date: 12/7/2016 9:14:00 AM
Ha, the first thing I thought when I saw the title was, "How did she know I was a jockey?" :) Then after reading this delightful and fun poem I thought, What if the donkey had been racing an Elephant? :) Ok...so the moral is, if you're a sore loser you are an ass even if you are a horse? This was really clever and fun Jan.
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Date: 12/7/2016 9:22:00 AM
Thanks for your great comment Chris and I do like your take on the moral :-) hugs Jan xx

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