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The Moving World

humankind f a l l s the great icebergs once anchored safely in their own domain ever so, so, s l o w l y commence a catastrophic journey. footsteps below the ice submerge our lies. it was us speedingthroughtime it was us who overshot our mark.

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Andrea Dietrich

Date: 10/23/2014 9:33:00 PM

A fave on this one now!! quick soupmail.

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 10/23/2014 9:32:00 PM

I came back to your oldies and landed here at this one again, and that is great because I got to see the note you left me here. wow, just by taking out submarine, it is SO much better!!! And are the footsteps below the ice, the remains of mankind after the destruction? well, I want to sign off tonight letting you know I appreciate your flattering remark at my latest post. It was an oldie that I did a MAJOR revision to. I changed it up a lot to meet that contest requirement.

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 10/21/2014 6:33:00 PM

Had to go see one of your oldies before terminating my session here today. Maybe I will check out just a few on the new poems list and get off to start dinner. This one is a bit mysterious to me. I really like the way you played with your lines. Is it a general indictment of mankind or is it pertaining to some actual historical occurrence. With the mention of submarines, I think it may have to do with something in modern history. Sorry for being dense. Another thought: is it about global warming? That was what I first was thinking. well, goodbye for the night!!

Maurice Yvonne
Date: 10/22/2014 8:45:00 AM

I never liked the submarine, I thought it would be confusing. Before you Andrea everyone kept telling me to keep it in. I am now following my own instincts I took out the submarine. Yes it is about global warming. You are not dense the error was mine. Thank You.