The Mane Male of the Pride

Panthera so proud His lioness bows with pride King of the jungle

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Christopher Higgins

Date: 5/25/2009 7:37:00 AM

You captured this very well my friend....good writing.

Dane Ann Smith-Johnsen

Date: 5/25/2009 12:24:00 AM

Hi James, This haiku reminds me of pre-women's liberation days in America. Is it still like that in Scotland? You know, women on the pedestal, bowing as needed, and serving the king his meals. I can see the analogy between man and the lion. The lionesses are the hunters, feeding the pride. (I think.) I wrote a poem about women's Lib. Did you happen to see it? I like your Haiku. It says a lot. And though seemingly simple, says so much about social structure! Very nice! Lovingly, Dane

Justin Presson

Date: 5/24/2009 5:24:00 PM

I'm not sure if you meant to do this but the placement of your letter "o" throughout the poem gives a boldness to the words. Bold and proud like the lion. you have done an excellent job with this style. you've taken a snapshot of a powerful image. great write!!!

Laura Mckenzie

Date: 5/24/2009 2:18:00 PM

Great imagery! Laura :)

Carolyn Devonshire

Date: 5/24/2009 1:43:00 PM

Ah, the majestic "Lion King." Great image of one of God's most beautiful and powerful creatures! Love, Carolyn

Brandy Megens

Date: 5/24/2009 1:34:00 PM

Pride and prejudice what all we want as people to be the ONE full of imagery i like very much