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The Lovely Bones

I took her leg and snapped it like a twig Twig like was her truly delicate frame Frame each of the carefully placed white bones Bones have that chalky oh so ancient smell Smell the past for her future could not come Come my friends together we'll solve the crime Crime committed one hundred years before Before we ever knew of DNA DNA will tell us who the girl was Was she the only one killed in this way? Way to many questions to be pondered Pondered long enough to find the answers Answers found by powers of deduction Deduction and keen imagination Imagination freed her lovely bones. My new form consist of 15 lines and ten syllables per line. The last word of each line must form the first word of the following line. The poem must maintain coherent thought to be effective. The other twist is that it should make the reader start off by thinking the narrator is sinister. Because I didn't follow instructions I haven't entered it in the contest. It was suppose to be a rhyming form and only 7 lines. Oops!

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Date: 6/15/2016 12:13:00 PM
An interesting poetic form, Richard. Thank you for reading April Violets. It's early piece reedited – for the better I hope. Again thank you for the stop by. / M
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Richard Lamoureux
Date: 6/15/2016 2:09:00 PM
Thanks Maurice, it was my pleasure to stop by.
Date: 6/13/2016 4:37:00 AM
omg!... i am so taken by this splendid work, rich!... so glad you were inspired by my contest..a winner in my heart; greeat form!..huggs
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Richard Lamoureux
Date: 6/13/2016 7:56:00 AM
Hi Nette, I'm pleased you like it. Hugs Rick.
Date: 6/12/2016 9:22:00 PM
I really found this outstanding and interesting of course...I am quite thrilled by this...Lovely Bones ...A7 and a Hug ~ Red
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Richard Lamoureux
Date: 6/12/2016 11:23:00 PM
You are sweet, thanks Red.
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Red Fiery
Date: 6/12/2016 9:24:00 PM
and doesn't matter if it is eligible for the contest...u already impressed your readers...:) as always...
Date: 6/12/2016 3:40:00 PM
good write, Richard, I like the form, we did something similar to this a while back calling it a chain verse. Thank you for reading "Sprays of Flowers For My Woven Basket" Hugs
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Richard Lamoureux
Date: 6/12/2016 6:30:00 PM
It was my pleasure Eve.
Date: 6/12/2016 1:12:00 PM
You always get carried away and come up with something brilliant Sorry you blew the contest but it turned out well any way Love Mom
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Richard Lamoureux
Date: 6/12/2016 6:31:00 PM
I love you too mom. As you know, I have never been great at reading directions *lol*.
Date: 6/12/2016 7:00:00 AM
Not eligible for the contest, but eligible to be included in your list of good poems! ~ Have a nice day, Richard! // paul
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Richard Lamoureux
Date: 6/12/2016 7:39:00 AM
Thanks Paul. ;0)
Date: 6/11/2016 10:28:00 PM
Very creative, you know I love sinister!:)
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Richard Lamoureux
Date: 6/12/2016 7:40:00 AM
Yes I do Arthur. Why not give the form a try.
Date: 6/11/2016 9:13:00 PM
Sinister to the end. Match image nice read
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Richard Lamoureux
Date: 6/12/2016 7:40:00 AM
Thanks Weston.
Date: 6/11/2016 7:44:00 PM
Very interesting, you write for these contests, fudge up the form but it turns out freakin' magnificent. Make sure u take a look at my latest contest, I've used my own photography as the prompt pics. I'd love to see where you go with it. You are awesome and your pen is brilliant.
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Richard Lamoureux
Date: 6/11/2016 7:52:00 PM
You are sweet. I will check it out. Hugs Rick.
Date: 6/11/2016 7:32:00 PM
you did very well with your created form. A shame you did not do the right contest way. There are so many rules, I know. I loved this theme and used it myself. Maybe you like the crime dramas like I do on ID tv? Did you see the Lovely Bones movie? It was really good.
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Arthur Vaso
Date: 6/11/2016 10:27:00 PM
If I am correct, Dr. Kay Scarpetta, a famous coroner in a crime novel series!
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Richard Lamoureux
Date: 6/11/2016 7:34:00 PM
No, was it a crime movie? Thanks for being the first to comment.

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