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The Love In My Heart Burns In Vain

----I thought I had posted this a while back...guess I didn't. Oops. : ) here it is...couple years old. When sorry words offer but sadness and pain, When weary thought drifts into the tides of shame, When heavy darkness fills my soul, Freezing last embers upon the coal, The love in my heart burns in vain It burns in vain, for I can never quite reach The paths that entangle, while the demons breach It burns in vain, for I try so hard for naught My tears in a frost-bitten muddle—construed and caught As snowfall sifts ice onto disdain, As afternoons crawl into midnight shade, As every mistake has torn me apart, This foolish soul crushed—bashed from the start The love in my heart burns in vain It burns in vain, for reality is but a fret Knowing tragedy shall befall, though it comes not yet It burns in vain, for I have hurt you still As I try to escape the furrowing doubts that kill So now I cringe, and cower, and remain So caught in your sorrow as I turn away So sorry and hateful for what I put you through For as I falter, you are ever true The love in our hearts burn in vain Yet, somehow the yester-embers among the frozen coals return Upon the frost-bitten windowpane—somehow they burn

Copyright © | Year Posted 2015




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Date: 7/18/2016 4:31:00 PM
What a beautiful write Laura, was the 5-4line alternating stanzas planned, or that's just how it flowed? Ending with a couplet is also very striking. You just invented a new form I think, you could call it sonnet/quintain hybrid or something like that.Very original!
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Laura Breidenthal
Date: 7/19/2016 3:41:00 AM
Thank you John. Nothing was planned actually. Lol Guess it is what it is, and I am glad you got to read it and to recieve your sweet feedback..<3~Laura
Date: 11/20/2015 8:03:00 PM
Wow. I can barely put into words how amazing this poem is. This poem could make a book of yours fly off the shelf. This is going into my favs. Well done -JT
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Date: 10/10/2015 2:36:00 PM
You have come a long way!
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Laura Breidenthal
Date: 10/11/2015 6:25:00 PM
Thanks sweetheart! ~Laura
Date: 10/10/2015 2:13:00 AM
Love is not in vain while it keeps hearts aflame Laura. The way you express the frost of regret, and the sorrow of seperation forces the soul to stand, to demand the truth of love. "Knowing tragedy shall befall, though it comes not yet..." there is tremendous emotional pressure in this poem, yet what is it that's staves this hateful tragedy, could it be love that finds the hidden flame. Your final lines bring feeling back to the fingertips of frostbitten love Laura...J.A.B.
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Laura Breidenthal
Date: 10/10/2015 3:25:00 AM
Yay (: You quoted my favorite line. Thank you for such a sweet and thoughtful review on this poem... ~Laura
Date: 10/8/2015 11:11:00 PM
Lovely, expressive piece. A masterpiece of words painted by an expert artist. The emotion in the words can be felt easily. Wonderfully done. -becca
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Laura Breidenthal
Date: 10/9/2015 12:24:00 AM
Thanks so much, Becca :) ~Laura

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