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The Guy I Met

When we first met I was so unsure But now it's clear in my mind and is no longer a blur Even though it will take some time to get over my past I know that you and me will last. So lets take it slow and see where it goes Who knows, maybe one day we'll be a couple of old crows Each day you prove to me there is a real man in this world A man that makes me feel like a pearl of a girl Each night in my dreams I find your face Wrapping your arms around me in a warm embrace Fear of my past lingers in my mind But I know you're not their kind

Copyright © | Year Posted 2009




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Date: 4/21/2009 3:18:00 PM
You've got the feeling definitely. Now let's work on rhythm; keeping the rhyming word on the same syllable. And if you want to make it seem more lyrical and original, you can use some rhymes that are not so often used; more advanced; words that keep in sync with the theme; there's so much you can do! You've only just found some gold dust; now it's time to dig the mine. Good luck! :)
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