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The Golden Cup

there he sat, still an Restless under the muddy light post on the Slimy, Cruel hill the Dust blew in a daze and Mud spat in his face the Rain began. there he watched his home Bury away his mother, father, sister, and son fly deep into the waves the Fog sat in, and sat thick while the Wind roared in wheezing and pushing the rain kept on then came a rich, beautiful man bearing a clean red cross on his chest his smile sympathetic, but reason hollow Depression crept in, slow and quiet picked a spot and was made comfortable the Rain crashed hard but there, behind the clean blond hair over the mud, and past the dirt a smooth, white cloud beckoned. his heart, blackened and crushed. the Rain, deep and dark inside, had Stopped.

Copyright © | Year Posted 2011




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Date: 5/21/2011 12:24:00 AM
Many Congrats Maddie on notching up third spot in Debbie's contest. Luv & best wishes - Hitendra Mehta
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Date: 5/20/2011 10:06:00 PM
Congratulations on your win. This one is quite unique.
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Date: 5/20/2011 3:22:00 AM
Congrats on your well deserved win x
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Date: 5/19/2011 8:36:00 PM
Many congrats on your GREAT WIN, with this sensational narrative, Maddie. Lainie
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Date: 5/19/2011 12:31:00 PM
Congratulations on your well deserved win in Debbie Guzzi's contest Maddie. Love, Carol
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Date: 5/19/2011 11:48:00 AM
Emotional write regarding a disasturous situation. Love the emotioned conveyed thru nature... Gwendolen
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Date: 5/19/2011 8:54:00 AM
Nature is so alive here. Nice! Congrats on your win, Maddie. Cheers, ~Soulfire~
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Date: 5/19/2011 8:32:00 AM
Very unique take on the challenge, Maddie-- I really like how you personified the elements here, and of how there is hope in the end-- Super Congratulations :)
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Date: 5/19/2011 7:35:00 AM
Congratulations, Maddie...a wonderful depiction of the blackness of a sad day.
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Date: 5/19/2011 5:53:00 AM
Congratulations on the third place win in the contest of debbie, Maddie
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Date: 5/19/2011 5:21:00 AM
Congrats Maddie on your great win in Japan contest.. enjjoy luv..
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Date: 5/5/2011 2:54:00 PM
Hi Maddy! Thanks so much for entering my contest, so far, what you have written is along the lines of what I was hoping for and you have been moved on to the next round, yet, as a reader I would want more, why was the man wearing the red cross's gesture a hollow gesture? where is the cup in the story? what is the cup? And why did you choice to capitalize Restless/Dust/Bury/Fog/Depression/Rain/Stopped? If this was a clearer sentence or message I would get it..but i don't? Please polish this GEM
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