The Gift

Pliant, pleading flesh, Exposed, over exposed, recesses. Sheath of wonder, pain, poise Full of sensory joys. Held in, held up, dis played; Cherished birth, God gifted days. Living, longing flesh, Envelope of humanities rest. Convoluted cause of distress, Immediate source of redress. Held in, held up, dis played; Cherished birth, God gifted days. Encircled, enclosed, re formed, Vehicle of love, so, reborn. Arise, synthesize, surprise ploys; Full of sensations joys.

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Abraham L

Date: 5/3/2009 3:56:00 AM

Thanks for the comments, and i love this one good write Abe

Pawlu Pascarawlu

Date: 3/31/2009 5:43:00 AM

I really like the flow of this poem, and such descriptive words, really great writing here.

Ernilando Tugaff

Date: 3/15/2009 11:16:00 PM

Deborah, well-penned piece of art. Keep on posting. Ernilando

Debbie Guzzi

Date: 3/14/2009 6:30:00 AM

Pleasures of the flesh..soft smile..they are God's gifts too. Angels don't get them, only humans do.

Belinda Parish

Date: 3/13/2009 6:11:00 PM

I have to agree with Robin on this one...The cycle of life....Interesting write Deborah

Robin L. Gass

Date: 3/13/2009 10:25:00 AM

The cycle of life, birth, rebirth (spirtual). I read this and the comments several times and I can see it in these ways. I love the couplet lines and the effect of the repetion! Beautiful, interesting, write, my fiend! Love, Robin

L'Nass Shango

Date: 3/13/2009 6:33:00 AM

Stanza 3 is magic girl, and ties the detail together. You are crossing borders where your imageries cross reference so many allusions. Are you conscious of them? I love the play.

Diane Christian

Date: 3/13/2009 4:19:00 AM

aww so well written, yes its great to have the joy of new life to be Born of God Amen to this wonderful write. from diane

John Rhinem

Date: 3/12/2009 8:21:00 PM

Smile~"Hello Gifted and Precious Deborah Guzzi!!"~I sincerely hope that life has been treating "You" wonderfully dear lady!!? This was a very well written and intriguing write~it made me think of a mother and her baby? The baby being the focus of the wonder within the write? The reason for the awe and thus the thankfulness? Smile~I loved it!!!~"My Love and Warmth To You Always Deborah, John!!!":)

Carolyn Devonshire

Date: 3/12/2009 6:09:00 PM

Interesting perspective of the birthing process, Deborah. Can't help but wonder what is in the mind of an infant at the moment they leave the womb and enter the world. Nice work, Carolyn

Sandra Hudson

Date: 3/12/2009 5:56:00 PM

Thanks for the advice, I guess I should have put fictional at the bottom of my poem, LOL. But in reality I have six grandchildren, two boys and four girls. I became a grandma at the age of 10 ..ha ha okay that too was fictional...LOL-AA