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The Destroyer

Cold and still, motionless unless you caress its rapid fire. Swaddled in an old fleece jacket stained with pellets of sweat; suppressed in darkness, weeping some say. Restricted freedom and tears bonded together barely by passionate rage. A caged door open to a bird not willing to fly without being coached into the sun. A lifetime failing to rise above tortured circumstances; concealed and loaded with enough artillery to blast through mountainous rocks holding dreams captive while listening to elevator music. Anticipating the chance to advance and prove to the world its worth and power; secretly feeling small and empty, surrounded by a pulse and heartbeat and a world of knowledge and sadness. Standing in a long line of trigger happy masters eager to kill with words.

Copyright © | Year Posted 2015




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Date: 2/28/2016 10:35:00 PM
I am glad I searched back for your first poem here , as this is truly superb free verse my friend! A7
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Danetta Barney
Date: 3/3/2016 11:45:00 AM
Thank so much.
Date: 1/16/2016 3:47:00 PM
A lovely write. You bring your words to life
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Danetta Barney
Date: 1/17/2016 4:25:00 PM
Thank you Rizwan. :)
Date: 12/4/2015 9:04:00 PM
Fascinating! '...while listening to elevator music' is a cool phrase. If I had to listen to elevator music for any length of time I'd go crazy, and feel like I was being held captive. Many powerful phrases here, and lots of vibrant imagery. Well done Danetta! Best wishes, Keith
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Keith Bickerstaffe
Date: 12/4/2015 11:47:00 PM
I'm glad you didn't!
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Danetta Barney
Date: 12/4/2015 11:43:00 PM
Thanks, and I almost left that line out. :)
Date: 12/3/2015 2:43:00 PM
wow beautiful. very strong imagery. I love it! welcome to psoup Danetta. #7
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Danetta Barney
Date: 12/3/2015 9:19:00 PM
Thank you so much for the comment and the welcome. :)
Date: 11/29/2015 11:03:00 PM
Hi Danetta, this is such an excellent first posting that I enjoyed reading! I look forward to reading more of your work! Welcome to PoetrySoup and best wishes as you continue to churn out wonderful poetic pieces! Warmest regards and a score of 7! Pandita
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Danetta Barney
Date: 11/30/2015 8:13:00 AM
Thank you so much and I'm loving this place!!!
Date: 11/29/2015 9:54:00 PM
Epic and Awesome write, Danetta, WELCOME to poetry soup. I hope you have fun with this wonderful community. You'll find many friendly poets who are ready to support and give positive feedback. I will enjoy following you and your poetry :) We are Lucky To Have you. Enjoy Poetry Soup:) Your New Poet Friend @-> LINDA <-@
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Danetta Barney
Date: 11/29/2015 10:44:00 PM
Thanks so much and I feel like a kid on a playground. This is a great place to be. :D
Date: 11/29/2015 2:56:00 PM
By the way, we have a sweet Destroyer on this site. SKAT
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Poet Destroyer A
Date: 11/29/2015 9:54:00 PM
Ditto :)
Date: 11/29/2015 2:50:00 PM
Danetta, Welcome to Poetry Soup. It will be a delight to read and become familiar with your poems in the future. As for now, I will greet you with the same smile others passed when I first joined the soup. Wishing you and your poetry the best. I hope you get to meet all the nice poets around here STARTING with me- SKAT :-) Please drop a hello and tell me a little about yourself if you wish. I would like to be your newest poetry soup "FRIEND" Hugs* SKAT
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Danetta Barney
Date: 11/29/2015 5:42:00 PM
Thanks and I really look forward to reading as much poetry on this site. I can't believe I stumbled across it just last night. I'm loving it.

Book: Shattered Sighs