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Condemned to be my truth inside, to you I've given all my pride- when our celestial stars collide, I'll drain out all the tears I cried. For you alone have broken me, and threw out all my good debris. The depth in your imperfections- you destroyed all my perceptions, d i s c o n n e c t e d a connection, never wanting your affection. May the shadows keep you quiet, wishing your secrets are private. You have stolen my innocence, forgetting all my relevance- I prayed for my deliverance, from you a dark bad influence. You damaged my mortality, and blocked your informality. I will admit I'm stronger now- your abuse I will not allow, my psyche you will never plow, my body clean and wonder how. Condemned to be my truth inside, NO LONGER WILL I HAVE TO HIDE. Author -luloo October 28, 2015 Form: LaCharta Poem Rhyme Scheme: AAAABB CCCCDD EEEEFF GGGGHH Eight Syllables in each line

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Date: 9/12/2016 9:05:00 AM
This is so good and wow what a picture. Congrats on your win.
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Date: 9/10/2016 12:18:00 PM
This is a GOOD poem, I am very much in like with it, I relate to the content and find the delivery impressive ... CayCay
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Date: 9/9/2016 11:59:00 AM
Trials and tribulations often leave us with renewed strength and wisdom -- one of life's truisms.... Congrats, Laura! :-)
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Date: 9/8/2016 2:30:00 PM
Retaking control and enhancing a better destiny, you speak to all who are stunted and enslaved. Speak on my friend. GBU!.
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Date: 9/8/2016 10:52:00 AM
Congrats on your win Lady Laura. LINDA
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Lu Loo
Date: 9/8/2016 11:30:00 AM
thank you :)-luloo
Date: 3/14/2016 1:47:00 PM
Hi Luloo, congratulations on your placement in the contest,richly deserved, excellent write....Vlad.
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Date: 3/13/2016 10:37:00 AM
Laura, Congratulations on your win. Thank you so much for supporting my contest. Stop by my blog "Names on Poetry Soup" if you like. It would be nice to hear from you and all those who I honored with a placement. XOX ~LINDA~
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Lu Loo
Date: 3/13/2016 12:27:00 PM
Thank you very much I'm grateful you enjoyed it :)
Date: 2/5/2016 1:35:00 PM
what a spell!.. congrats on your well deserved win, lou.. huggs
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Date: 2/5/2016 8:48:00 AM
Well done Laura! Your outpour of pain is heart rending!
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Date: 2/5/2016 7:42:00 AM
First and foremost, I love the dancing appeal of your poem!!! Congrats Laura, for your well, deserved WIN in the contest!! ;-)
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Lu Loo
Date: 2/5/2016 2:19:00 PM
Thank you Teddy :) *smiles* -luloo
Date: 2/4/2016 11:28:00 PM
Very well done, Laura. A very poetic beginning leading into a powerful finale...I like the snake format, adds nicely to the style of the work. and if the words so happen to be personal then i also commend you on putting them into creative work. congratulations on the contest :)
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Lu Loo
Date: 2/5/2016 2:17:00 PM
Many thanks Sam, it's completely fictional. I saw a movie last year and it was so disturbing. I put myself in her shoes...Have a blessed day :) *smiles*-luloo
Date: 2/4/2016 10:46:00 AM
Congratulations on your First Place win for this amazing poem, Laura. You expressed such sad emotions using this seemingly difficult form, which I am not familiar with, so well! Hugs, Sandra
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Lu Loo
Date: 2/4/2016 1:13:00 PM
Thank you Sandra you are always so sweet to me. I want you to know how much I always appreciate your kind feedback, you are a true sweetheart...*smiles* *hugs* -luloo
Date: 2/4/2016 8:58:00 AM
Congratulations on this awesome win! I'm not familiar with the form and I really like it. Will be trying it soon. I like the way you said a lot in a distinct way, could feel emotions as I read and could relate. A 7
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Lu Loo
Date: 2/4/2016 9:51:00 AM
Thank you very much Susan, you are very sweet and I always appreciate you popping in and reading my poems. Have a great day :) *smiles* -luloo
Date: 2/4/2016 8:06:00 AM
Congratulations on a well deserved win. Fantastic write.
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Lu Loo
Date: 2/4/2016 9:50:00 AM
Thank you very much Scott :) *smiles* -luloo
Date: 2/4/2016 7:48:00 AM
Congratulations on your win, Luloo. Well penned.
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Date: 2/4/2016 9:50:00 AM
Thank you Daniel very much, you are a sweet soul :)-luloo
Date: 2/4/2016 7:29:00 AM
superlative Laura it oozes the fear and pain and I love the form congrats on 1st place hugs
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Lu Loo
Date: 2/4/2016 9:47:00 AM
Thank you Shadow, I am honored for my placement, have a great day :) *thanks* -luloo
Date: 2/4/2016 6:21:00 AM
Dropping back with my congrats LuLoo:-) hugs Jan xx
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Date: 2/4/2016 6:08:00 AM
Very nice rhyme scheming, Laura. Congratulations on another win with this one!
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Lu Loo
Date: 2/4/2016 9:46:00 AM
Thank you Lin :) *smiles* -luloo
Date: 1/7/2016 3:21:00 PM
a great entry you did into Rob's contest. He loves this kind of poetry, Laura! Deep and moving! Congrats on your win.
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Lu Loo
Date: 1/20/2016 8:15:00 AM
Thank you Andrea:) *smiles*
Date: 1/7/2016 2:22:00 PM
Such a powerful and touching write Laura, congrats on your win. From Jean
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Lu Loo
Date: 1/7/2016 3:15:00 PM
Thank you Jean :) *smiles*
Date: 1/7/2016 1:44:00 PM
Laudable! Congrats on your placement, Laura!
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Lu Loo
Date: 1/7/2016 3:15:00 PM
Thank you Balveen! *smiles*
Date: 12/17/2015 8:50:00 PM
Laura, congratulations on your 1st Place win! Hugs, Sandra
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Date: 12/17/2015 5:48:00 PM
WOW WOW WOWOW LuLoo this is outstanding many congrats on your win:-) hugs Jan xx
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Lu Loo
Date: 12/18/2015 12:13:00 PM
Thank you Jan! !Luloo*smiles*
Date: 12/17/2015 3:42:00 PM
LAURA, Congrats on your old best poem. HUGS **SKAT**
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Lu Loo
Date: 12/17/2015 3:48:00 PM
Thank you SKAT! :)
Date: 12/17/2015 2:01:00 PM
Heartfelt write Laura. Congratulations on your 1st place win!!!
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Lu Loo
Date: 12/17/2015 3:48:00 PM
Thank you Michael :) -luloo
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