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A lovely breeze blew from the sea That autumn day was almost done; Her thick and wavy raven hair Was boldly gleaming in the sun. She rode her mare with idle reins Along the vast and sprawling sand, Deserted beach that gleamed of gold. The seagulls flew from sea to land. I had no doubt that she could sense My silent gaze. Her head held high She made no move to pull the dress That showed her leg right to the thigh. She turned and gave a fleeting smile Knowing full well what cards to deal And next on impulse flicked the reins To urge her mare and dug each heel. She was away; I followed suit As hooves threw sand into the air. The race was on, yet I held back And watched the sight of flowing hair. We neared the cove where water played I licked my lips and tasted salt. She pulled the reins, her mare obeyed; I did the same, came to a halt. Her face was radiant, breast that heaved; I was a failure at disguise. Appraising look gave me away; I saw the glimmer in her eyes. Our eyes communed, there by the sea Before our lips dared utter speech I bade my time, while my heart beat And hoped the silence he would breach. The sunbeams softly kissed my skin My dress, it danced within the breeze My eyes invited him to me My lips curled up in playful tease. Dismounting from his feisty horse He slowly made his way to me I saw in stride and bearing he Was all a dream was meant to be. His fingers slid in silky mane Caressing it with tender touch Yet in my mind, all I could see Was my long hair in ardent clutch. I dared not breathe, for he was close He might discern my wild desire And so demurely I did stroke My lovely mare to quell the fire. He spoke to me, in mellow tones And asked of me, to take a walk Up to the cove where water splayed It offered us a place to talk. I acquiesced with faintest smile His brawny hands reached round my waist No sooner had I touched the ground Than to his body, mine he braced. Down in the cove, he touched my heart He lay me bare, my flesh and soul And love I felt, in every part For on the day, he made me whole. Down in the cove we two made love She gave her all, her flesh and soul There on that day in twilight zone She touched me so; my heart she stole. ---------------------------------------------------- A Collab with Paul Callus

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Date: 1/16/2015 1:45:00 PM
I read this posted by Paul. I thought I would read it again here. A Fav!
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Eileen Manassian
Date: 1/18/2015 12:41:00 AM
Awwwww....that's sweet. Love to have you visit me, Maurice. Hugs
Date: 1/16/2015 11:30:00 AM
Oh truly wondrous collab,,,in fact i read it twice then thrice,,,words that paint a picture a continuous saga of sheer joy...
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Eileen Manassian
Date: 1/18/2015 12:42:00 AM
Harry, dear. You are so sweet to visit and read it several times. What could give a poet more pleasure than to know that the words are effective....Thank you. It was a joy working with Paul. It flowed easily....he wrote....I responded...an edit here and there...and we were done! Glad to have your lovely visit. Hugs
Date: 1/15/2015 6:01:00 PM
Hi Eileen, I gave your form another try for Craig's contest. Can you give it a look and let me know if I am on the right track. Thanks!
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Date: 1/15/2015 10:33:00 AM
I know you read my comment on Paul's site but I still wanted to give you the deserved 7 and favorite your poem.
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Eileen Manassian
Date: 1/15/2015 10:36:00 AM
Yes, I'm glad you came here. That's Paul's site....this is mine. I need you here. Thanks for the post, Richard. I remember our collab, Dancing Coins. Take care.
Date: 1/15/2015 9:14:00 AM
You Rock!! Outstanding my dear Little One . . . this was truly outstanding . . . the passion and intensity was bursting off each line! The last line I can attest too!! This should be POTD and more . . . a 7, fav for me.
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Eileen Manassian
Date: 1/15/2015 10:08:00 AM
:) I'm so glad you liked it, David. I must say...I'm happy with how it turned out. Thanks for your words of affirmation. Means a great deal to me. That last line, eh? Hugs
Date: 1/15/2015 4:15:00 AM
A collaboration made in heaven for to write how romanticism and love should be displayed on earth! Congratulations to both of you, Elileen and Paul, Paul and Eileen! A seven to each! Certain it is many would be happy with your poem. I am happy for both of you!
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Eileen Manassian
Date: 1/15/2015 10:42:00 AM
Thank you, my dear poet. Your seven is lovely to receive. I love to write about love and romance. That is my favorite theme. Paul wrote the first stanzas and it was easy for me to respond to the lines he suggested. I'm glad he asked me to collab with him. I'd suggested a collab earlier, but this was the right time for it. Sending love...
Date: 1/15/2015 2:17:00 AM
This is a beautiful romance of mature desire...she may have stole his heart but his love she surely won. The landscape and native innocence accentuated with the horses is strongly enchanting. "Dismounting from his feisty horse...Was my hair in his ardent clutch" great imagery and passion! You and Paul have made an inspiring collaboration Eileen...J.A.B.
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Eileen Manassian
Date: 1/15/2015 10:49:00 AM
Thank you, Justin. I've always wanted to work with Paul. He's a lovely person. He's collabed with several people and I'm glad he asked me to work with him on this one. I'm glad you've visited. You've missed several of my poems...Good to see you.
Date: 1/14/2015 8:13:00 PM
Terrific duet! Well done, the both of you, outstanding!
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Eileen Manassian
Date: 1/15/2015 10:50:00 AM
:) Thanks, Casarah. THis is a dream come true for me. Paul is a great person to work with. He knew what I'd most like to write about and gave me just the setting and scenery I wanted. The rest....well, that was just a piece of cake! I'm very very pleased. Hugs
Date: 1/14/2015 7:06:00 PM
I commented where Paul posted it - simply outstanding Eileen and Paul I think I gave Paul 3 x WOW lol - its a 7 from me - awesome write my passionate friends:-) Hugs Jan xx
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Eileen Manassian
Date: 1/14/2015 7:22:00 PM
I hope so Jan. I really hope so, my dear. Yes...I was one of the early fans of Jadazzle...The romance there...the Bronte tales...was palpable. Hope it works out.
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Jan Allison
Date: 1/14/2015 7:17:00 PM
Its wonderful when you collaborate and the poem just flows so naturally with little or no alteration as did my writing with Darren - never a day goes past when I don't think of him and I can only hope he will be back in touch again soon:-) Hugs jan xx
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Eileen Manassian
Date: 1/14/2015 7:12:00 PM
Thanks, Jan. Paul made it into my file of favorite poets pretty early on. I love his work and am blesse by his friendship. I've wanted to collab with him for the longest time. I'm glad that it worked out. I must say...it just seemed to flow pretty nicely with hardly any edits. :)

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