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The Bakery and a Buttermilk Bar

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I'd almost forgotten, how fondly this little hamlet snuggles tight against the purple hills, and how State street divides the town into two parts, like a pizza, one half a progressive present, and the other half, the antiquated past. The old library building still exists, although now home to an upscale art gallery, but, over there, on the western slice, is a geometrical shaped building that is now called library, even though it looks more like the Star-ship Enterprise. I drive slowly past old Gibble Park, and across the street is the same, weathered brick building, where I spent many early summer mornings Suddenly, I surrender to the decade when I was seventeen, working a summer job, helping Mrs. Casey. Back then, it was the only bakery in town, and I worked a morning shift. I was cashier, and handed out powdered donuts, jellied scones, and giant bear claws, to familiar faces that never seemed worried about cholesterol, sugar, saturated fats. Day after day, they sampled with satisfaction, and gossiped, and enjoyed the morning routine. I remember, with my own naive' innocence, befriending a quiet, middle-aged man, with glossy dark hair, Cary Grant looks, and his overly charming smile. I thought him to be nice, and knew who he was, from his daughter, who was a school mate, from a class below me at my high school Mrs. Casey, (with a crease in her brow) telling me "Look out for that one" but never quite making it clear just what she meant by such a comment He always came by on his way to work, ordered a buttermilk bar, ...helped himself to a paper cup of coffee, then often talked with me, while I wiped down the glass cases, and waited on other customers. But, I was flattered by the attention, Unexpectedly, when the end of summer came, while paying me for his buttermilk bar,he smiled sadly, barely said a word, and out of his pocket, he handed me a small package. He quietly told me to open it when I got home,..... it was to be our little secret. Not knowing how to respond......I said nothing. Upon arriving home, ....alone in my room, I opened the small gift, and inside a gold cross, on a long gold chain, and a small. brilliant diamond smack-dab, mid-center of the cross. I didn't know what to think, and I never told a soul. It has never been worn.....it is still in my drawer....and though I had been warned, somehow it makes me sad to think that some things still aren't clear. I was green, wet behind my ears. at the time there seemed nothing to fear, .... all the lines were blurred, .... I had much to learn Even now....I can't be sure. _____________________________________________________ For the Short Story Contest: Sponsored by Frank Herrera

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Date: 9/29/2016 1:04:00 PM
Congratulations, Carrie! ...Fran
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Date: 9/27/2016 1:40:00 PM
That was very good, Carrie. I love ambiguous endings. Great stuff. :-)
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Date: 7/16/2015 7:21:00 PM
You made this feel so real. Congratulations, I enjoyed your story.
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Date: 7/15/2015 4:24:00 PM
Sensational writing, dear Carrie. Laine
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Date: 7/14/2015 10:32:00 AM
Congratulations on your win in Carol Eastman “Story Poem Contest” Hugs Eve
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Date: 7/14/2015 2:04:00 AM
Hi Carrie, Congrats in Carol's story poem win. always ~~ LINDA ~~
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Date: 7/14/2015 12:17:00 AM
Carrie, Congratulations on your sweet win. Love SKAT
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Date: 7/13/2015 2:00:00 PM
dropping back with my congrats Carrie :-) hugs Jan xx
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Date: 9/29/2014 5:13:00 PM
He liked you, Carrie. And since it was a cross, I think it was fairly innocent a token of love. Why did you never wear it? This was really nice. I can't even think what contest was "blue mountain" poetry contest. Gosh, how the heck did I miss THAT one!!! Well, congratulations. Now I have to go see this winners' list.
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Date: 9/29/2014 6:45:00 AM
Congratulations for your top winning list Carrie! ^_^
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Date: 9/28/2014 7:36:00 PM
Back to congratulate your top spot win Carrie.
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Date: 9/27/2014 10:31:00 PM
Great win Carrie, loved it
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Date: 9/26/2014 10:36:00 PM
Lovely and nice piece,Carrie...Congrats on your superb win...
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Date: 9/26/2014 9:53:00 PM
Fabulous write Carrie! Congrats on top place win!
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Date: 9/26/2014 9:23:00 PM
Congratulations and I love this... It's beautiful. Love and prayers, Gina
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Date: 9/26/2014 6:21:00 PM
You told the story brilliantly....I really enjoyed it.... Congrats on your win
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Date: 9/26/2014 6:15:00 PM
you told an incredible story with amazing imagery Carrie. many congrats on your win:-) hugs jan xx
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Date: 9/26/2014 4:51:00 PM
I love this story Carrie. I couldn't take my eyes of my laptop. That is somehow so weird I mean if that was all? I would of moved out of town so I could wear it.
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Date: 9/24/2014 10:14:00 PM
I love this. It is so charming. It is so full of unique imagery of a world foreign to me. What could be greater than that, poetry, an endearing story and a free trip to a beautiful unvisited place. I also love the picture you chose. It compliments your write without being intrusive. Good Luck in Regina's contest.
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