Tell Me

As the sun slips silently over the horizon my eyes rise up to the heavens higher than the tallest oak beyond the smirking moon and past the sparkling stars showering the sky. I beg of you, I beg of you to tell me tell me what lies ahead will this solaced heart be loved will the stars align once more please tell me what is in store A falling star tumbles from the sky and I wish I wish upon that star so bright I wish for her to hold me tight I wish and I wonder I wonder when and I wonder if If her heart beats like mine If she wants to hold me til the end of time I question and I wonder and I ponder in the shadow of the great vast sky Will she tell me what's deep inside or will she run and hide?

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Carol Eastman

Date: 6/20/2015 8:50:00 AM

I thought you were married?.. Just Kidding... Will she run? Just depends on if you chase her the way Jack says he does... Just kidding again... You have such a romantic heart... Well done!

Alexis Y.

Date: 6/18/2015 5:31:00 PM

Tim ,this is a well written piece.That's filled with love and desire.What you so skillfully wrote it was as though I witnessed that star falling from the sky. Great job! I'm glad I stopped by to view this 7 piece:) Alexis

Poet Destroyer A

Date: 6/17/2015 11:47:00 AM

beautiful write, enjoyed this one...luv p.d.

Carol Eastman

Date: 6/15/2015 11:15:00 AM

Remember when you wish...to specify that you don't want her to be a Dragon... If you think MY Dragon is bad... They say a girl Dragon is more Demanding... and far worse. But she'll never run and hide... Honest! Remember! A falling star is what got me my Dragon Egg... Just saying!

Richard Lamoureux

Date: 6/14/2015 11:37:00 AM

I can tell you this is a fine bit of writing my friend. When you have a chance check out our group poem, it is now finished.

Anne-Lise Andresen

Date: 6/12/2015 6:21:00 AM

- A lovely poem, a pleasure to read .... always with love from your heart, Tim - I wish you a great weekend :) - hugs // Anne-Lise :)

Emile Pinet

Date: 6/11/2015 12:29:00 PM

Very well written with strong emotions tugging at the heart strings. Your poem uses good imagery and maintains a poetic flow through the whole piece. Emile.

Eve Roper

Date: 6/11/2015 11:48:00 AM

Amazed on your waterfall of heart warming writes. a 7 hugs eve

Charmaine Chircop

Date: 6/11/2015 10:03:00 AM

Such a beautiful heart can compose only enchanting deep moving poetry Tim.This is such a treasure,so passionately done and full of love.A favourite.

Eileen Manassian

Date: 6/11/2015 9:28:00 AM

Very passionate, Tim....Lovely

Ravi Sathasivam

Date: 6/11/2015 2:10:00 AM

Excellent. Very romantic and impressive write. Enjoyed. Tfs.

Gay Stuntzner

Date: 6/11/2015 12:32:00 AM

Tim, You are incredibly prolific. Very impressive collection.