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swan you glide < so gracefully on a cool blue lake or on teal pond water making ripples with your five fluffy cygnets. You use tall bull rushes and reeds for security from predators who may lurk in ( ( ( ( ((( deep murky water or in the azure sky) ) ~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~ ~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~ tiny cygnets < stay with the cob and pen for protection until formation of their snowy white feathers and finally their wings form. Then ( ( (they are free to fly the nest and find their mate for life )) ~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~ ~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~ Concrete Crush Contest Sponsored by F J Thomas 12~25~16

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Peter Dome

Date: 1/8/2017 10:29:00 AM

Ooh I could do with a cob now bacon and egg.. Love this visual fluffy feathered poem. well done. Can you eat swan eggs?.Pete.

Maurice Rigoler

Date: 12/27/2016 8:01:00 PM

A writer and now an graphic artists?! Amazing. There pictographs were very popular in earlier centuries in English literature. I've tried a few and are not easy to do. Great job, Jan. Thanks for the stop by, and best to you in the coming new year – unless Mr. Trump screws the next four years for all of us. / M

Jan Allison
Date: 12/28/2016 11:18:00 AM

I am not 'arty' Maurice but I did try hard for the contest:-) I do love the fact they take me totally out of my comfort zone and i try new styles. I found this quite a challenge!:-) As for Trump and Brexit we have to wait and see what challenges lie ahead for us all:-( hugs Jan xx

Paul Callus

Date: 12/27/2016 4:51:00 AM

Wow! Truly a work of art...beautiful shapes...you make use of that blue dragonfly to conceal many hidden talents, Jan! Hugs // paul

Jan Allison
Date: 12/27/2016 9:58:00 AM

You are so sweet Paul. I am not 'arty' but wanted to try hard for Flo's contest ... she is such a fabulous person and a friend to many on soup:-) hugs Jan xx

Matthew Anish

Date: 12/26/2016 4:44:00 PM

What a clever "shape" poem - and a nice photo to go with it Great job! Peace & Love Matthew Anish

Jan Allison
Date: 12/26/2016 4:46:00 PM

Thanks so much Matthew:-) hugs Jan xx

Alexis Y.

Date: 12/26/2016 1:28:00 PM

WoW! Jan, you did a fantastic job. I think you just secured a place on the list with this write. Swans are so beautiful and graceful creatures. No need to wish you luck. A without a doubt seven:-) Alexis PS, I hope you and your loved ones had a Merry Christmas.

Jan Allison
Date: 12/26/2016 1:33:00 PM

I am not 'arty' so i found the contest a real challenge - I originally wanted to do about a cigarette and smoking lol but I changed my mind and wanted to do a bird and this is the result:-) we had a very quiet Christmas as i have another chest infection and we couldn't have mum near us but she had a great time at the care home - just me and hubby for the first time since 1992:-) Hope 2017 is brilliant for you Alexis:-) hugs jan xx

Chris Green

Date: 12/26/2016 12:11:00 PM

Now that is how it is suppose to be done. Wow Jan, this is fantastic and such beautiful. You just have to love swans, they are majestic creatures and do choose a mate for life. Beautiful my friend. This should take top honors with ease.

Jan Allison
Date: 12/26/2016 12:22:00 PM

Aww thanks - they are so so beautiful and wonderful to observe:-) I'm not sure what Flo is looking for with the contest Chris as long as my poems are read and enjoyed that is the important thing to me:-) hugs jan xx

Demetrios Trifiatis

Date: 12/26/2016 2:44:00 AM

Beautiful, both in form and content dearest, Jan. Hugs and a seven!

Jan Allison
Date: 12/26/2016 4:55:00 AM

Thanks so much Demetrios I enjoyed the challenge:-) hugs Jan xx

Len Gasun

Date: 12/26/2016 12:18:00 AM

Well done concrete poem my dear friend, Jan! I love it. Super 7! love lots and hugs, Leonora

Jan Allison
Date: 12/26/2016 4:58:00 AM

Thanks Leonora its my first attempt at this form:-) hugs jan xx

Deborah Burch

Date: 12/25/2016 11:23:00 PM

Well done Jan!! Aren't swans wonderful!! Good job on your concrete!! Wishing you the best for the contest!! Big Hugggs!! Deb

Jan Allison
Date: 12/26/2016 5:04:00 AM

They are so beautiful Deb:-) hugs jan xx

Ilene Bauer

Date: 12/25/2016 7:50:00 PM

wow! this looks amazing, jan, and sounds very lovely, too...

Jan Allison
Date: 12/26/2016 5:05:00 AM

Thanks so much Ilene it was quite a challenge to create this form as I am not at all 'arty':-( hugs Jan xx

Eve Roper

Date: 12/25/2016 7:42:00 PM

This is marvelous, Jan,,,,,, a winner already. Hugs Eve

Jan Allison
Date: 12/25/2016 7:44:00 PM

I'm not sure if it is 'poetic' enough or even if its what flo is looking for - my initial thoughts was to do one about smoking but then decided as dad had lung cancer it would have ended up being pretty dark so thought a little more lighthearted would be better - place or no place in the contest i enjoyed the challenge - i am sure you will come up with a cracking poem you are so creative:-) hugs jan xx

Connie Marcum Wong

Date: 12/25/2016 3:54:00 PM

Wow Jan, this is so impressive and creative! I love it that they mate for life. We have only black swans here and they are beautiful. I bet this does wonderfully in the contest! 7 ; )

Jan Allison
Date: 12/25/2016 4:01:00 PM

Thanks for your lovely comment:-) I've only ever seen white swans Connie - all swans in the UK belong to the Queen... they are so beautiful to look at but they can be quite aggressive especially when they have young:-( I'm not sure if this is what Flo is after but its all my muse could come up with - I was toying with doing a cigarette shape but it seemed quite boring when I thought of doing an bird shape and it turned into a swan:-) Hugs jan xx

Winged Warrior

Date: 12/25/2016 3:02:00 PM

Beautifully done my dear Jan...I love swans...best of luck in the contest...god bless & Happy Holidays...^WW^

Jan Allison
Date: 12/25/2016 3:05:00 PM

They are such graceful birds ^WW^. I have a wonderful photograph I was given many years ago by a friend I worked with it is of a Swan with a line of about 9 cygnets... I wish I has actually been able to witness it for myself. Hope you have a wonderful time during the festive period:-) hugs Jan xx