Surrender

Pouring down to the depth of my soul Struggling to give up a mighty position To let this long driven desire take control Humbling it is to my retrospection Never timid, this deep voice appraises demands and opinions Which destructs my discretion Moments such as this, redefines the certainty of my division Such as not being so humbling with tamed aggression Set in the ways of self, my flame divides Commonly set in the way of two, the fire burns It was decisively made to stay in a woman's place on her side And so the lesson continues to train the flame to learn As it foolishly burns

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Marquis Mc Mills-Cooper

Date: 7/28/2013 8:51:00 PM

Written very nicely, though I didn't see the whole picture, your commentary led me out of the woods. This one was intriguing....

Kori Wright
Date: 6/6/2015 4:40:00 AM

Hi. I terribly apologize, I haven't been on here in a very long time. But however, I still would like to thank you. People reading my poems and even commenting means the world to me. Honestly if I didn't write this, I would get lost too lol. But in all my poems that I feel are complex to comprehend, I leave a comment telling what the poem is about. Once mote, Thank you very much.

Pace Ink-U-Script

Date: 7/22/2013 3:11:00 AM

Excellent way of articulating what this poem is about in your view. Its hard to find that man that was raised up in a traditional sense. "Taking care of the household, being the "head." I truly understand the meaning of this poem. I love how you manage to state the problem and the way you solved it. It's funny as we continue to grow in life we become stagnant and set in our ways. Mostly its due to life experiences.

Kori Wright
Date: 6/6/2015 4:35:00 AM

I do apologize for my late response. I haven't been on here in such a long long time. I would like to thank you so much for reading my poem and commenting. I am also glad you enjoyed it. Again thank you.

Kori Wright

Date: 4/10/2013 9:13:00 AM

It's easy to get lost in this poem if you do not know how to read in between lines and pick up on clues. This poem basically describes a strong woman that is use to living life as both rolls. But falls into a relationship where she won't allow the man to be just that and feels that if she gives up her power then he would be in control which ends up dividing the two but she has a moment of clarity and realizes that when there is a real man she needs to only play the part to a woman