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Surreal Nature Rural Oklahoma: Cool autumn night on the front porch, thoughts and opinions about poetry and painting shared with a dear friend over wine and water. Poetry is sacred she said, and painting is my inner life. Painting was once my wild mind, I replied, but poetry’s now my amateur art. moon’s half-darkness... shy in its suit of light shadows of pines Three “yips,” almost unnoticed. Coyotes she said, tricksters in authentic guise playing their night games. A cow’s bawl close by, in a moment silenced by a contrapuntal victory chorus, soprano and tenor voices singing to the darkness in celebration of success – a kill. moon behind clouds balance... the meaning of beauty & death Written 10.08.2013

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Date: 12/3/2013 7:00:00 PM
I enjoyed reading your verse this evening, especially the prose. Light & Love
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Jack Jordan
Date: 12/3/2013 8:16:00 PM
Thanks for your kind comments... Jack
Date: 10/25/2013 4:58:00 PM
Congrats on your winning work..Way to go!!!Sara
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Date: 10/25/2013 6:08:00 PM
Thank you, Sara... Jack
Date: 10/25/2013 10:45:00 AM
Hi Jack,, awesome Haibun. Have yourself a sweet day.......... LOVE SKAT .
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Date: 10/25/2013 12:43:00 PM
I think it will be a good day. Itr started well anyway... Jack
Date: 10/25/2013 9:55:00 AM
congratulations Jack... always~ PD
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Date: 10/25/2013 12:42:00 PM
Thanks, Linda... Jack
Date: 10/25/2013 7:41:00 AM
Jack very good congrats on a fine win Shadow x smile
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Date: 10/25/2013 5:04:00 AM
Congrats on the win in the contest, Jack
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Date: 10/24/2013 8:51:00 PM
This poem hits home to me......we can hear the cows, and from our front porch, the song of the coyote keeps us company. We too are rural.....and this is where we find the balance between beauty, and death. What a beauty this poem is. (I would have placed it higher)....:)
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Date: 10/24/2013 11:44:00 PM
Thanks for the wonderful reply. This was memorable for me because I'm a city boy who was visiting coyote country. A magic experience... Jack
Date: 10/24/2013 8:47:00 PM
excellent haibun...love your descriptiveness and the haikus were perfect! Congrats on your win
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Date: 10/24/2013 11:42:00 PM
Thank you, Sandra... Jack
Date: 10/24/2013 6:12:00 PM
This is not the work of an amateur Jack, congratulations.
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Date: 10/24/2013 11:42:00 PM
Thank you for the compliment, Richard... Jack
Date: 10/17/2013 6:35:00 PM
I could actually picture myself right there with you...hearing and seeing this.....maybe I heard the same coyotes....:-) ...they are both haunting and beautiful....gotta love our state!!!!!
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Date: 10/17/2013 9:54:00 PM
It was a magic experience, one of those, "I'll never forget..." events... Jack
Date: 10/12/2013 6:02:00 AM
Jack this is sooo good love it Shadow x smile
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Date: 10/12/2013 8:25:00 AM
Thanks for the compliment, Shadow... Jack
Date: 10/11/2013 6:15:00 PM
this is an awesome haibun...cleverly crafted....enjoyed this one :)
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Date: 10/11/2013 6:20:00 PM
Thanks, Sandra. It's essentially my first haibun... jack
Date: 10/11/2013 1:37:00 PM
Love it. Original and well versed. -Patrick Farley IV
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Date: 10/11/2013 3:04:00 PM
Thank you, Patrick. I appreciate the comment... Jack
Date: 10/9/2013 9:19:00 AM
This was uplifting & deep for me. You seriously created this atmospheric surrealism with such ease. One of your best, yet...
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Date: 10/9/2013 9:34:00 AM
Thanks for reading and commenting, Drake... Jack
Date: 10/8/2013 8:39:00 PM
lovely introspection with great insights about friendship-bonding and life's treasures, jack...beautiful phrasing all the way!..:) huggs
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Date: 10/8/2013 9:54:00 PM
Thanks as always, Nette. It's good to hear rom you. Jack
Date: 10/8/2013 3:12:00 PM
- Proficient as always, Jack !!! Love it !!!! - oxox // Anne-Lise :))))
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Date: 10/8/2013 4:39:00 PM
Thanks, as always... Jack
Date: 10/8/2013 1:55:00 PM
Jack, I almost see the picture in the dark, in your rural Oklahoma! Your last three short lines are a true philosophy! Keep it up. JM
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Date: 10/8/2013 2:12:00 PM
Thanks for the comment, Joseph... Jack

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