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Surreal Nature

First frost has come overnight, and the quaking aspens have blanketed the hills with brilliant splashes of amber.  Even the ruts in the driveway, are beautifully trimmed in rime, glistening in the touch of sunlight that has just now fondled the horizon.  Finn,..our golden lab, struggles to get up on his feet this morning, to be let out.  He limps a bit stiffly, then hesitates, reluctant to step out into a chilly dawn.  It's the first time I have noticed how rudely is a gray veil clouding those wise, brown eyes.  Finally, he ventures outside, walking gingerly, under a sky, jaggedly streaked with purple. The morning air is persuading the cold breath of winter soon to follow.   Mourning doves are slowly disappearing, although two familiar stragglers, like old friends, are sitting high upon the shed roof, watching the leaves tumble like golden gems to the earth....and keeping watch, like soldiers, at their post.  And Finn forgets his discomfort, for just one moment, and runs for a closer look.  He jumps, barks, and they fly off into the sunrise. There is an odd feeling in today's somber light, which seems to turn the page of another season.   

a tail thumps the door
as I reach for the leash...
we wait for the sun

For Contest Sponsored By Broken Wings 9/20/13

Copyright © Carrie Richards

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  1. Date: 10/25/2013 5:07:00 PM
    Congrats on your winning work..Way to go!!!Sara

  1. Date: 10/25/2013 3:24:00 PM
    Congrad's on your haibun winning. Light & Love

  1. Date: 10/25/2013 1:09:00 PM
    I am sorry I have been out of the loop for so long, I hope I can back into sync soon but many congratulations on your win carrie love xx

  1. Date: 10/25/2013 10:42:00 AM
    Congratulations Carrie, awesome Haibun. Have yourself a sweet day.......... LOVE SKAT

  1. Date: 10/25/2013 9:52:00 AM
    Carrie, this is a very nice win.....PD

  1. Date: 10/25/2013 5:21:00 AM
    Congrats on your win! Loved the Haibun- Y.L.N

  1. Date: 10/25/2013 4:55:00 AM
    Congrats on the win in the contest, Carrie

  1. Date: 10/24/2013 7:30:00 PM
    love describe the beauty of fall so well in this piece...congrats on your win :)

  1. Date: 10/24/2013 6:30:00 PM
    gorgeous Carrie love it congrats on fine win Shadow x smile

  1. Date: 10/24/2013 5:54:00 PM
    Outstanding work! Congratulations.

  1. Date: 10/24/2013 5:27:00 PM
    Congratulations on your fine win, Carrie... jack

  1. Date: 10/24/2013 5:04:00 PM
    I love to read your lengthier poems Carrie, you story your poetry well, congrats on your win love xxx

  1. Date: 9/23/2013 1:25:00 PM
    Awesome poem beautifully drawn with different magic like colors. Loved always, bl

  1. Date: 9/23/2013 12:35:00 PM
    Wow!Wonderful!Will you please teach me poetry?

  1. Date: 9/22/2013 3:59:00 PM
    awww, love this one, Carrie - brings back happy memories

  1. Date: 9/21/2013 2:40:00 PM
    Ahh!!! Enjoyed reading your creative work..Reads like a winner to me..Thanks for the visit to say congrats..I have had a Black Lab who got in that shape only probably worse before he died..I can just see your dog from the description..Sara

  1. Date: 9/21/2013 12:57:00 AM
    I LOVE IT!!!! Gosh, I hope i can find the time tomorrow to sit myself down and try to do one that comes close to the genius of this one!!