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Sun Without a Rays

Bent knees on the ground When the world pulled me down Face of mine turned into frown Like I was lost in a crowd Walking all alone, Searching for unknown Wanting what's best, All I had were tests. Victory was never mine Though I kept on trying So, I waited for the time Until I got tired of trying Maybe I'm destined in deep vain Left with nothing gained All my efforts gone astray Like the sun lost its rays.

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Thomas Kourkoulis

Date: 3/26/2015 8:36:00 PM

I hear in your poem that I fail when I try to be something that I'm not. Like you said:"all my efforts gone astray/like the sun list it's rays". Being myself takes no effort. Thanks for your poem!

Leng Mundoc
Date: 9/4/2015 2:06:00 AM

Your welcome. Have a lovely day fren.:)

Victoria Anderson-Throop

Date: 3/26/2015 2:01:00 AM

desolation is a common human condition. i think it is difficult to write about, but you do very well. the image of a sun which lost its rays is a good one.

Leng Mundoc
Date: 3/26/2015 6:52:00 AM

Thank you for the compliment. It will help me move out of my shell and grow. I wish to do more and inspire. Thanks for the kind words. :)

Florin Andronic

Date: 3/25/2015 11:20:00 PM

may the sun get some rays :)

Leng Mundoc
Date: 3/26/2015 6:54:00 AM

I hope so.:) thank you for passing by.