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Such Tearful Words

Such tearful words said at my sister’s wake, her short life, beyond my comprehension. I try to stay strong for my daughter’s sake, trepidation allures apprehension......... Where’s the help for suicide prevention? Her goodbye letter hit me really deep, for now she lays in a permanent sleep. If time moves this slow, how do I advance? Her withered white roses I shall still keep, I just wish she gave loves light one more chance. If angels do weep, can I taste her tears? Because I swear I can still hear her cry. On her final day I could sense her fears, why couldn’t she give tomorrow a try? I knew deep down she was ready to die. If leaving brought her joy I should feel ease, but all I wish for is one more hug please… Oh, why did her own life did she wish to take? I hear her voice sometimes, it’s just a tease, such tearful words said at my sister’s wake.
Dizain: Ten lines of 10 syllables each line Rhyme Scheme: A-B-A-B-B-C-C-D-C-D Contest: Two Stanzas - Two Only - Poetry Contest Sponsor, Broken Wings Date Written: July 19, 2016

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Date: 7/27/2016 3:44:00 AM
Congratulation son your win.
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Date: 7/27/2016 12:34:00 AM
Back to congratulate you on your well deserved win, Laura:)
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Date: 7/26/2016 1:14:00 PM
Poignant poem read from you. Done well. Congrats on your win my friend, bl
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Date: 7/26/2016 11:20:00 AM
Painfully beautiful, congratulations LuLoo...
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Lu Loo
Date: 7/26/2016 11:26:00 AM
thank you Charlie :)-luloo
Date: 7/26/2016 6:14:00 AM
I love the way you've designed your verses, like arrow tails!! :-o Congrats Laura, for your placement in the contest!! ;-)
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Lu Loo
Date: 7/26/2016 11:26:00 AM
thank you Teddy :)-luloo
Date: 7/26/2016 12:05:00 AM
Such a heartfelt poem written with great skill, Laura. Congrats on your win!
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Lu Loo
Date: 7/26/2016 11:26:00 AM
many thanks Laura :)-luloo
Date: 7/25/2016 7:54:00 PM
Laura, congratulations on your win, so heartbreaking, and love the form. Thank you so very much for your congratulations on my poem , “Free Its Soul Bound Wild Stallion”. Hugs Eve
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Lu Loo
Date: 7/25/2016 8:31:00 PM
thank you lovely Eve :)-luloo
Date: 7/25/2016 7:12:00 PM
You have brought pain out so beautifully Laura,congrats on your win!
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Lu Loo
Date: 7/25/2016 7:37:00 PM
thank you very much Sara :)-luloo
Date: 7/25/2016 6:26:00 PM
Dear Luloo, so sad is this pain in your heart, and how well you express it in your poetry. Congratulations on your fine win in the contest. Hugs, Sandra
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Lu Loo
Date: 7/25/2016 7:37:00 PM
thank you sweet Sandra, be blessed :)-luloo
Date: 7/25/2016 4:26:00 PM
This is so heart-wrenching--and very well-written. Congratulations on your win. I hope that writing it helped. Janice
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Date: 7/25/2016 7:36:00 PM
Thank you Janice, and yes all the writing I do about her loss helps more than I can ever express. Her death is my greatest inspiration for writing... I owe her for that because I would not be able to touch others who have been through what I have if not for her...:)-luloo
Date: 7/25/2016 3:30:00 PM
I know you get so much inspiration from your lovely late sister Karen - a sad but lovely poem:-) She would be so so proud of you LuLoo:-) congrats on your win:-) hugs Jan xx
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Date: 7/25/2016 7:35:00 PM
aww thanks Jan, that was very nice... :)-luloo
Date: 7/25/2016 3:18:00 PM
Congrats! my friend Laura on your win...such a sad but beautiful write...god bless...^WW^
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Date: 7/25/2016 7:34:00 PM
thank you WW :)-luloo
Date: 7/25/2016 2:53:00 PM
Congratulations on this win, Laura. I love the shape you created.
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Lu Loo
Date: 7/25/2016 3:04:00 PM
thank you lady, congrats to you also :)-luloo
Date: 7/20/2016 1:08:00 AM
This is a soul-touching beauty for your sister, Laura:) Sure to win:)
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Lu Loo
Date: 7/21/2016 3:58:00 PM
many thanks sweet Jo:)-luloo

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