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Succumbing To Time

Derelict now cold Mossed stones in sporadic spill Ageing arms out spread They, competing for the light Sadly, both succumb to time .

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Poet Destroyer A

Date: 3/29/2015 10:25:00 PM

James, Thank you for the sweet reply to my comment. Love LINDA

Paul Callus

Date: 3/24/2015 12:26:00 PM

Sadly, everything has to succumb to time, but hopefully this fine poem will last long! Congrats on a fine win, James. #7 // paul

Poet Destroyer A

Date: 3/22/2015 1:58:00 PM

JAMES, Congratulations on your awesome TANKA 2 win Always & Forever <3 Luv ~LINDA~

James Fraser
Date: 3/23/2015 3:18:00 PM

Thank you Linda, always and forever back // hugs, James :)

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 3/21/2015 9:39:00 PM

James this was beautiful imagery. I did not score it higher because I was not sure who the arms belonged to: a tree or a person? If a tree, limbs would have fit so nicely there!! Also, I don't want to see capitalized lines in my contest entries. Anyway, the message here is GREAT. Congrats in my contest.

James Fraser
Date: 3/22/2015 7:07:00 AM

Hiya Andrea, no worries. It's simply nice for ones poem to be read, anything more is a bonus. Wishing you a lovely Sunday :) :)

Carolyn Devonshire

Date: 3/17/2015 12:04:00 PM

Dear James, we all succumb to time. I'll step into the shadows so as not to "compete for the light." Let the youth have their day! Excellent tanka and it is a fine entry for the "derelict" contest. Always wishing success and happiness for my old friend. Love, Carolyn

James Fraser
Date: 3/18/2015 5:54:00 PM

Hiya Carolyn, I didn't know there was a contest until Jan mentioned it in her comment, so I thought, why not, nothing to lose. Thank you for your kind words, hugs//James :) :)

Olive Eloisa Guillermo - Fraser

Date: 3/17/2015 12:21:00 AM

Dino James, 2nd and 3rd line love it... :)! I see you spilling the ink... :D!! warm hugs//olive eloisa.. ^_^

James Fraser
Date: 3/18/2015 5:52:00 PM

Hiya Oliz, indeed spilling the ink presently, to spill more so soon with you... warm hugs aplenty//Dino James ;-) xx

Connie Marcum Wong

Date: 3/16/2015 6:55:00 PM

Wow James, this is quite wonderful! I love the way you intertwine the imagery of an ageing tree without using the word tree. Beautifully penned! 7

James Fraser
Date: 3/18/2015 5:45:00 PM

Hiya Connie, thank you kindly for the lovely comment, smiling, hugs//James :)

Jan Allison

Date: 3/16/2015 4:02:00 PM

Brilliantly penned James - such sad imagery and great alliteration - hope it does well for you in the contest:-) Hugs Jan xx 7 xx

Jan Allison
Date: 3/16/2015 6:18:00 PM

Yes Andrea has set one:-) Hugs jan xx

James Fraser
Date: 3/16/2015 5:10:00 PM

Hiya Jan, many thanks :) I didn't know there was a contest. Mmm, shall I enter, I'll sleep on it. Many hugs//James xx