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Solitude

No kindly weather this This that strips me of all but weariness Weariness creeps through my soul this dull day Day of colliding colours dimmed, wasted, washed away, and I I am drawn down into it's poverty of greyness, I drown Drown while dark clouds weep Weep for the solitary sparrow that flies Flies on a cruel wind, on the cusp of Life's deadly thrust Thrust about, poor bird, shall it be lost? Lost, brought down, uncared for, turned to dust Dust and no kind eyes to watch it while it dies Dies. In the claw of raw solitude it lies Cold, solitary....so alone Alone...like a whisper in the night...

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Date: 2/10/2018 3:36:00 AM
Fascinating. The alliteration really works well in this poem.
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Sheila Sacks
Date: 2/10/2018 3:50:00 AM
Thank you, Richard, your comment is appreciated!
Date: 5/2/2017 7:32:00 AM
Very impressive Sheila, great style and content ~ love the last line.
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Sheila Sacks
Date: 5/3/2017 4:22:00 AM
Thanks for the visit, Phil! Your comments are so welcome!
Date: 11/1/2016 7:56:00 AM
I love the style of this poem, I had not read or heard of a chained sonnet before, you did a wonderful job with this. Though the sadness is felt and loneliness seems to be the heartbeat of this poem, the beauty of the phrasing softens the touch as I read.
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Sheila Sacks
Date: 11/2/2016 1:34:00 PM
Chris I'm so pleased you enjoyed my poem! Thank you for your visit and wonderful comment! Sheila
Date: 10/7/2016 5:44:00 PM
Reads as if your solitude has pulled you into a state of depression, Sheila. This poem takes me to a dark and lonely place. Well written but I doubt that is the direction you intended. (just my interpretation)
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Sheila Sacks
Date: 10/8/2016 2:23:00 AM
Daniel, you're kind and thoughtful and I thank you for your comment. No I'm not depressed and have been truly blessed in life with great happiness......however, an extremely unhappy childhood still pulls me toward sadness....Hugs, Sheila

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