Solitude

eyes closed behind dark sunglasses - alone with my thoughts ---------------------------------- Contest: Monoku/One liner #4 Sponsor: Poet Destroyer A Placed 2nd ---------------------------------- Also inspired by this theme, but not for contest: a) away from it all, alone, but never lonely b) no illusion or disillusion...charging batteries

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Red Fiery

Date: 3/19/2016 8:36:00 AM

These words are not simply words... They define us and our life... Great write Paul ! I have always been impressed... Hugs Red

Paul Callus
Date: 3/19/2016 9:52:00 AM

And I'm always impressed by your comments, Red:) Thank you! Have a lovely weekend. ~ hugs ~~ paul

Connie Marcum Wong

Date: 2/11/2016 1:50:00 AM

Congratulations on your wonderful win Paul!

Paul Callus
Date: 3/19/2016 9:11:00 AM

Thank you once again, Connie; I am sure that I replied to your comment before, but coming back to this post today I realized that I have nothing to show for it! ~ All the best // paul

Anindya Mohan Tagore

Date: 2/10/2016 12:28:00 PM

Wonderful take, Paul. Other two monokus are also awesome. Cheers, Bobby

Paul Callus
Date: 2/10/2016 4:00:00 PM

Glad that you like it (them), Anindya. Thank you for the lovely comments. ~ Regards // paul

Susan Gentry

Date: 2/10/2016 2:52:00 AM

Congratulations Paul on your win with this awesome line.

Paul Callus
Date: 2/10/2016 4:01:00 PM

Thank you, Susan; your support is appreciated. ~ Regards // paul

Poet Destroyer A

Date: 2/9/2016 5:25:00 PM

hello, PAUL, Congratulations On your TOP win. I truly enjoyed every entry placed on the winning list. Stop by my latest blog "Silence Ululates" if you like. Always & Forever ~LINDA~

Paul Callus
Date: 2/10/2016 3:05:00 PM

Thank you Linda. I appreciate being on your winning list, especially since there were so many nice entries. It was not an easy contest to judge! hugs // paul

Sandra Adams

Date: 2/7/2016 9:32:00 AM

this one speaks volumes in so few words... sometimes my shades hide tears when i am not so alone with my thoughts... good luck in the contest, this is a form i do not believe i have ever attempted!

Paul Callus
Date: 2/7/2016 12:53:00 PM

Thank you for reading, Sandra; I hope there won't be too many reasons to shed tears:( Looking forward to read your first monoku:) ~ Regards // paul

Len Gasun

Date: 2/7/2016 7:15:00 AM

This is a wonderful monoku my dear friend, Paul. In solitude,we also find solemnity of thoughts. I think this must really be how monoku is written and I can see it's almost the same as what I've read to many but I don't know how to revise mine yet. Anyway, Good luck to both of us my dear friend. Thanks for sharing and reading mine. love lots and Hugs, Galeo

Paul Callus
Date: 2/7/2016 12:49:00 PM

As always very pleased with your feedback, Leonora. I am no monoku expert, but I am a keen learner...on a continuous learning process! All the best and big hugs // paul

Charmaine Chircop

Date: 2/6/2016 5:49:00 PM

We are never lonely indeed. Our thoughts are always with us. I can't just picture the image of someone closing his eyes behind sun-glasses lost in thought..but I can feel this.I've been there.Yoy are so good at this short form..that speaks volumes.

Paul Callus
Date: 2/6/2016 5:59:00 PM

Thank you Charm:) These one-liners are quite similar to classic/modern haiku/senryu; I find them handy to use when I want to capture a quick thought or image. ~ Regards // paul

Luaer Solnox

Date: 2/5/2016 1:57:00 PM

For me, I can hear the breaking of the waves. This was very calming, thanks Paul.

Paul Callus
Date: 2/5/2016 2:40:00 PM

I can hear those waves, too, Luaer! Thank you for reading and commenting/ ~Regards // paul

Nette Onclaud

Date: 2/5/2016 12:10:00 PM

a gem of a monoku, paul... in solace do we find peace... lovely metaphors!..huggs

Paul Callus
Date: 2/5/2016 12:36:00 PM

Thank you, Nette. I am pleased that you like it. Have a lovely weekend...hugs ... paul

Emile Pinet

Date: 2/5/2016 11:01:00 AM

A poem offering quiet reflection on the virtues of being alone. Emile.

Paul Callus
Date: 2/5/2016 12:02:00 PM

Thank you for reading and commenting, Emile. ~ All the best // paul

Anne-Lise Andresen

Date: 2/5/2016 7:44:00 AM

- Often a good feeling, but can also be sad - Luck in contest, Paul - hugs // Anne-Lise :)

Paul Callus
Date: 2/5/2016 11:58:00 AM

Thank you Anne Lise:) Solitude can do us lots of good, but as with other things, overdoses can be fatal! ~ Have a lovely weekend! hugs // paul

Demetrios Trifiatis

Date: 2/5/2016 7:34:00 AM

Wonderfully done, dear Paul! Good luck and a seven!

Paul Callus
Date: 2/5/2016 8:43:00 AM

Thank you my friend Demi! Both lovely comment and the 7 are appreciated. ~ Regards // paul

Olive Eloisa Guillermo - Fraser

Date: 2/5/2016 4:21:00 AM

I love your take Paul, like the letter b though.. =`) i thought the charging batteries is cute!!! =`) but all are great but that's the one i most like! =`)~Olive ELoisa =`)

Paul Callus
Date: 2/5/2016 11:45:00 AM

Thank you for reading and liking, Olive_eloi:) The older the batteries get, they need charging more often:) Hugs // paul

Barbara Gorelick

Date: 2/5/2016 12:23:00 AM

My favorite so far! BG

Paul Callus
Date: 2/5/2016 10:59:00 AM

Thank you Barbara...glad you liked it:) ~ Regards // paul

John Lawless

Date: 2/4/2016 10:35:00 PM

Ah, the camouflage of the profession nap taker....nicely done Paul

Paul Callus
Date: 2/5/2016 9:42:00 AM

Smiling at your comment, John:) Thank you for stopping by. // paul

Timothy Hicks

Date: 2/4/2016 6:28:00 PM

Good monoku Paul! I've never known what to think of someone when they wear dark glasses ... you couldn't tell whether their eyes were open or closed ... almost like wearing a mask. But this has a more zen quality which is fitting for haiku (or monoku). Long time no see, my friend.

Paul Callus
Date: 2/5/2016 9:28:00 AM

Great to see you Timothy! Yes...it has been a long time! Thank you for enjoying and commenting on my humble monoku. I already checked out your poems, but still no new posts in sight...waiting:) ~ Regards // paul

David Mohn

Date: 2/4/2016 6:07:00 PM

you could have gone with any of these Paul...fabulous

Paul Callus
Date: 2/5/2016 9:23:00 AM

You are generous, David:) Thank you! ~ Regards // paul

Jan Allison

Date: 2/4/2016 4:35:00 PM

Gosh you are on a roll with these Paul good luck in the contest:-) hugs Jan xx

Paul Callus
Date: 2/5/2016 9:15:00 AM

Hi Jan...txs for being the first to comment:) All 3 versions came to mind in the space of 5 mins; took me longer to decide which one to enter for the contest:) hugs // paul