Snail Haiku

frost shivers the grass on the doormat, a snail leaves a gift of silver

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Carolyn Devonshire

Date: 1/7/2011 10:44:00 PM

I must thank Audrey for telling me this evening how wonderful your work is, Eiken. She was right and this is an outstanding haiku. I'll be looking for your work in the future. Best wishes, Carolyn

David Smalling

Date: 1/5/2011 11:54:00 AM

Reads like an haiku, feels like an haiku, it is absolutely marvelous. Well done, Elken. I love it.

Eamon Duffin

Date: 1/3/2011 1:03:00 PM

Hi. So observant. We collect snails and bring them to my cousin for her ducks, ( we get eggs in return). Once again you excel. Eamon

Dr.Ram Mehta

Date: 1/1/2011 5:54:00 PM

Wonderful images you have worded in this haiku, Eiken

John Loving Iii

Date: 1/1/2011 5:48:00 PM

i've seen this. and i notice your a haiku expert. will be reading. john

Doris Culverhouse

Date: 1/1/2011 5:47:00 PM

those things are a probably eating up my plants!!

Constance La France

Date: 1/1/2011 4:48:00 PM

Thank you for your comment on my Haiku and it means so much coming from you as I can see you are a person who knows haiku~~

Linda-Marie Sweetheart

Date: 1/1/2011 4:32:00 PM

Oh I do luv this Eiken .. good luck in the contest... a vivid picture in words my friend... u need to put markings of four dots .... as the sponsor requested on his entries to emphasize the second line luv... and no commas in between or disqualified luv.. so try to adjust and go for the gold luv..

Audrey Haick

Date: 1/1/2011 3:52:00 PM

A perfect picture, Eiken. Happy New Year ! Peace, love, audrey

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 1/1/2011 12:59:00 PM

Hey do they still come out when it's that cold? If so, this is an awesome way to depict it! bye now, Andrea