Smiling Spitting Deadly Sins

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Author's Notes: "Smiling Spitting Deadly Sins" is a co-authored poem by Liam McDaid, Michael Clarke, and me. This poem is a dark theme fantasy write about evil and damnation that seeks to extinguish all that is good and bright, and to destroy mankind's most prized and positive emotion: "Love." And so we classify this poem as a dark theme fantasy write written in anticipation of Halloween that is just around the corner. More to follow for Halloween in the near future. (Gary Bateman - August 9, 2015) (Unrhymed Quatrain)

Categories: betrayal, dark, evil, fantasy, horror, imagery, and imagination.

Smiling Spitting Deadly Sins Son of the Devil evil and twisted when his mask falls away Through the curtains of death he turns truth into dark lies With horrible shadows haunting over Love's light so pure As jealousy reveals shades of a Soul’s envy at this moment Cunningly you crawl behind colors pride with selfish hurting Innocence casting stones—the fruits of a hideous lurking evil Filling you with stupid silly emotions crying crocodile tears Hate is your playground game as the Dark One takes his souls Weeping from the deep wounds inflicted on others at your wish While fighting one lost battle as your words burn from the ugly Fork of your tongue while spitting venom they become a vile Poison in which every last drop makes one’s very skin crawl When I see the light of truth awakening in your Soul’s eyes I really see a Hell-Fire scorching red hot who is the real you Your pretty tongue of thy father speaks the evil words of the King of Lies to my heart as it is touched by the serpent’s rasp Yet ever you can never always hide behind this perfidious mask And such words of beauty will not always hide what lies within The darkest outreaches of your Soul’s descent into damnation For Love itself is a journey of the gentle divine and the innocent But those who breathe the Hell-Fire can only fool us all so long And when their mask falls away they speak with a serpent’s tongue So vile and gruesome that they know not of Love as they strike and Bring eternal pain holding the Devil’s sword with their blackened hand Causing pain with greatest relish as they laugh heartily at the pain Inflicted on others not really knowing what they hold in their hand In hate and anger while striking out at all innocent souls as their Double-edged sword waits for those from the depths of Hell itself Gary Bateman, Liam McDaid, and Michael Clarke A Collaborated Poem, Copyright © All Rights Reserved August 9, 2015 (Unrhymed Quatrain)

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Liam Mcdaid

Date: 8/15/2015 10:01:00 AM

i would like to thank everyone for the heartfelt wonderful comments wishing you all a lovely weekend

Liam Mcdaid

Date: 8/12/2015 4:16:00 PM

reading this again just blew me away this one in my eyes hard to beat is one powerful three way write i remember once being spat at cast down low in judgement but i smile because the truth always reveals in the end wishing you both a fantastic weekend still laid up with fever but its easing

Gary Bateman
Date: 8/12/2015 5:33:00 PM

Hello Liam Mate!! Glad to hear from you and thanks for your note. It was a pleasure truly to work with you and Michael on this most wonderful and artistic effort. Sorry to hear about your fever. Ingrid and I wish you a most speedy recovery and our continued best wishes always. Cheers and Best!! Gary

Scott Thirtyseven

Date: 8/10/2015 8:29:00 AM

Geez fellas you certainly got the dark and creepy bit going, well done.

Gary Bateman
Date: 8/11/2015 7:56:00 AM

Hello Scott, Thanks from Liam, Mike, and me for you read and comment. Yup -- this one is a departure from the syrupy sweet love themes that are always popular. This poem actually has poignant message resident in Stanza 5, Verse 4. Sometimes people get lost in the words and imagery and fail to focus on the underlying message. This poem is supposed to get people to think. Glad you liked it!! Cheers and Best, Gary

Dorian Petersen Potter

Date: 8/9/2015 5:05:00 PM

Hi Gary,Liam n' Michael!Very powerful poem, you've penned here,my dearest friends.Awesome!Beautifully written!Excellent piece!I applaud you very big for writing this one.Great collaboration!Your pens are mighty golden!A 7 to each + fav!Wishing you a very lovely week!In His light!God bless you always!:)Love n' hugs!xoxox D.^O^

Gary Bateman
Date: 8/11/2015 7:48:00 AM

Hello Dearest One "D" -- I'm not sure when Mike or Liam will reply. But for me, on behalf Mike and Liam too, I say thank you so much for your wonderful comment and review (and for the 7 + FAV!!) of this rather dark tale. I think we're just getting warmed up a bit for Halloween with this write. Just now responding as I've been working on short stories for my second book. Likewise, I will you all the best for the week!! Cheers and Best, Gary

Anne-Lise Andresen

Date: 8/9/2015 9:01:00 AM

-This lines says a lot about the poets who write this wonderful poem,: "For Love itself is a journey of the gentle divine and the innocent" - A pleasure to read from you, a 7 X 3 !!! - Bravo my friends :) - Have a happy Sunday and a great new week :) - hugs & <3 // Anne-Lise :)

Gary Bateman
Date: 8/9/2015 9:40:00 AM

Hello Dear Anne-Lise, Gee I guess the 7 X 3 means the rating from you is a "21" which puts us in a super competitive category!! (Only Joking Here -- HA! HA!) You indeed caught perhaps the most key verse of this poem (Stanza 5, Verse 4) which plays on the challenge to love theme. Glad you enjoyed this A-L!! I know that Mike and Liam will be happy with you most gracious comments as I am!! Cheers and Best, Gary