Silouhettes Against the Face of the Sun

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you were walking along a blossom carpet holding three yellow calla lilies i could hear the blue river running along the rocks toward the cullasaja falls where the water raged we were like giraffes in the rain, first to feel the drops in our perfumed outdoor living roam we lived a fairy tale of here and now we lived a fairy tale two feet off the ground wilson’s warblers sang in their series of descending notes and now we were just silhouettes in the sunset eau sur peau et petits fruits rouges c'était nous at treks end morning strawberry and cream grew wild we could see nature’s pick dancing on the clouds as we sat for biscuit tea beneath a popcorn sky until the evening primroses announced another day done time to embrace in the warmth of your silky touch my eyes rain a sun shower on this our sacred globe.

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Andrea Dietrich

Date: 3/18/2015 7:52:00 PM

this one makes me feel as if you were really there beneath that popcorn sky. It had the feel of a sonnet too. An unrhymed one. Love your romantic touch and the images of nature throughout it. A seven!

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 3/18/2015 7:49:00 PM

Hey, I can't believe I am still finding oldies I had not read before. I think september is the only month that I will find them in. I have read all your stuff older than September and I think I started reading every single thing of yours in october. Do you recall? Let me read this one now. The picture is so interesting.

Tim Smith

Date: 9/12/2014 8:14:00 PM

Very lovely Maurice...I do love lilies.....cheers

Maurice Yvonne
Date: 9/12/2014 8:18:00 PM

Thanks Tim. I don't know if I like Lily anymore, I dated a girl named Virginia, Virgin for short but not for long.

Maurice Yvonne
Date: 9/12/2014 8:15:00 PM

Casarah Nance

Date: 9/12/2014 5:04:00 PM

Wow baby look at your descriptive skills! awesome:) I love the popcorn sky, what does the last line second stanza mean?

Casarah Nance
Date: 9/12/2014 6:55:00 PM

It does work better in french. very lovely :)

Maurice Yvonne
Date: 9/12/2014 5:17:00 PM

"eau sur peau et petits fruits rouges c'etait nous" loses a lot in the translation it is French and the literal translation means "water on our skin and red berries that was us" . As you can tell either I am crazy or it works better in French.