Silhouette

Hot day has come to an end Strong smell of smouldering wood Pervades the ravaged outback Where spiralling smoke drifts up Lazily as a full moon Highlights the bleak silhouette Of a lone surviving tree. ---------------------------------------- Paul Callus ~ 10th November 2014 Contest: Silhouette of a Heptagonet Sponsor: nette onclaud

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Connie Marcum Wong

Date: 7/19/2019 9:13:00 PM

This poem is simply gorgeous Paul. Very inspiring! xxoo : )

Paul Callus
Date: 7/20/2019 4:33:00 PM

Thank you; so pleased it attracted your attention, Connie. I love the titles prompt poem which you wrote...a sure winner, in my humble opinion. Warm regards // paul

Richard Lamoureux

Date: 11/14/2014 6:35:00 PM

This brings to mind all the majestic trees that were lost in our big fire in 2003. Kelowna had been close to being evacuated.

Paul Callus
Date: 11/15/2014 7:47:00 AM

Hi Richard! Unfortunately every year we hear about forest fires and the loss of trees...to these one can add creatures and humans, too. It takes so long to recuperate. // Have a nice weekend. // paul

Maurice Yvonne

Date: 11/13/2014 4:07:00 PM

One of my favorites on this theme so far. I can't imagine this not placing high on the list.

Paul Callus
Date: 11/14/2014 12:18:00 PM

Thank you for the faith you show in my silhouette, Maurice! cheers // paul

Rhonda Johnson-Saunders

Date: 11/12/2014 12:09:00 PM

Wonderful imagery...I love that the sadness of the scene has a silver lining. A sure winner! Love and Blessings, Rhonda

Paul Callus
Date: 11/12/2014 12:18:00 PM

Thank you for stopping by, Rhonda, and for the positive comments; so pleased that you enjoyed. Take care. // paul

Olive Eloisa Guillermo - Fraser

Date: 11/12/2014 1:57:00 AM

:) your poetry painted the picture so well... superb! ..............olive eloisa I remember my poem THIRST.. :) ;)

Paul Callus
Date: 11/12/2014 11:29:00 AM

Yes, I remember your poem, in which your tree was awaiting death...mine escaped that fate and looks to the future with hope. Thank you for the 'superb' comment!:) // paul

Mama Bear

Date: 11/11/2014 8:43:00 AM

not just a great poet but a lovely painter too. Well done. Winner for me. Blessings Edith

Paul Callus
Date: 11/11/2014 12:44:00 PM

....and Jan even more so!! // paul

Jan Allison
Date: 11/11/2014 12:10:00 PM

I met Paul a few weeks ago Edith - he is absolutely delightful:-) Hugs Jan xx

Paul Callus
Date: 11/11/2014 11:47:00 AM

You are very kind; I love your lovely comments and the faith you show in this short write! Thank you for stopping by. // paul

Hija De La Luna

Date: 11/11/2014 3:56:00 AM

this is phenomenal, Paul! very vivid description..each word like a paint brush whipped up a different color completing a well-blended picturesque painting. the best for me!

Paul Callus
Date: 11/11/2014 1:03:00 PM

Your awesome poetic comments are so very encouraging, Hija!! I am pleased that I managed to press the right buttons! I thank you from the bottom of my heart:) // paul

Barbara Gorelick

Date: 11/10/2014 8:32:00 PM

Awesome...not sure how it could be any better. Sure to be a winner. BG

Paul Callus
Date: 11/11/2014 12:46:00 PM

Ohhh I love your 'awesome' comment, Barbara! You rock!!! hugs // paul

Tim Smith

Date: 11/10/2014 6:39:00 PM

Loved the image you painted Paul..I just watched a documentary on how these rare mushrooms pop up after a forest fire...amazing how destruction brings new life....cheers Tim

Paul Callus
Date: 11/11/2014 12:49:00 PM

Glad you enjoyed it Tim. It's nature's way of cleansing and renewal, I suppose. cheers // paul

Frederic Parker

Date: 11/10/2014 6:27:00 PM

the lone survivor in silhouette, on a barren landscape.... great painting Paul..good luck

Paul Callus
Date: 11/11/2014 12:51:00 PM

Thank you Frederic; it is always the lone survivor (as in a story script) who stands for hope after tragedies. Txs for stopping by. // paul

Casarah Nance

Date: 11/10/2014 5:22:00 PM

Oh that is great! hope your entry is tops of the list my friend :)

Paul Callus
Date: 11/11/2014 12:59:00 PM

You are too good to me, Casarah:) In that case I would happily have you standing next to me! // paul

Ilene Bauer

Date: 11/10/2014 5:03:00 PM

beautiful imagery here, paul! you've painted a very vivid picture...

Paul Callus
Date: 11/11/2014 12:57:00 PM

I'm so pleased you found it to your liking, Ilene! Thank you for another lovely visit:) // paul

Jan Allison

Date: 11/10/2014 5:02:00 PM

Fabulous imagery Paul - you painted a bleak picture in my mind - but one of hope with regeneration after the inferno - a 7 from me - I never give anything less! hugs jan xx good luck in the contest my friend:-) xx

Paul Callus
Date: 11/11/2014 12:02:00 PM

Thank you Jan...your insightful comments make for lovely feedback. So pleased that you enjoyed! That surviving tree has a mission in life....hope. hugs // paul

David Meade

Date: 11/10/2014 4:45:00 PM

Through the hot fires new life comes and the lone survivor stands ready to greet them. Great poem that interacted with all of my senses . . .

Paul Callus
Date: 11/11/2014 12:43:00 PM

Thank you David for reading and delving into the heart of my poem. Pleased that you enjoyed. // paul

Dorian Petersen Potter

Date: 11/10/2014 4:44:00 PM

Beautifully description of a very hot day and shouldering humidity. Come to Florida especially during the summer months. Lol. Great imagery! A 7 for you. Take care Paul! GL in the contest! :) Love and hugs! xxxx D.

Paul Callus
Date: 11/11/2014 12:56:00 PM

Many thanks my dear friend! I'll accept your 7s anytime:) the important thing is that you find the write to your liking. If I really like a poem I give it a 7 and nothing less. As always, you're very welcome here:) hugs // paul