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Original Poem The silence of snow, A hidden bird chirping sweetly; Crackle of ice, somewhere, Squirrels on tangled branches, Crows calling loudly above. This snow covered path lonely, With echoes of my footsteps; O, hear the beautiful hush, The tinkle of a distant creek, The silence of snow. Three Days Later Hear the silence of snow falling, Birds chirping from hidden places; Ice crackling, groaning and moaning, Frozen branches hanging like chandeliers, An ice covered creek somewhere whispers. The path I walk is lonely quiet, I look back at my snow footprints; Oh there is a beautiful hush lingering, The tinkling of icicles falling from trees, And I listen to the silence of the snow falling. _________________________ March 4, 2016 Poetry/Verse/Silence of Snow Falling Copyright Protected, ID 16-764-124-0 All Rights Reserved. Written under Pseudonym. For the contest, Oops - Poetry Contest Exercise sponsor, John Lawless Second Place

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Date: 4/3/2016 11:10:00 AM
Big Congrats for the beautiful poems to win the contest. Love. Anisha D
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Date: 4/3/2016 4:17:00 PM
Anisha, thanks for visiting my poem with congrats and beautiful ~
Date: 3/30/2016 12:40:00 PM
Hi BW!!! Congrats for your top placement with this enchanting verse!!! ;-)
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Date: 3/30/2016 3:22:00 PM
Teddy, thanks for the congrats and the enchanting!
Date: 3/30/2016 12:05:00 PM
Each at par with the other! Congrats Constance
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Date: 3/30/2016 3:28:00 PM
Balveen thanks for the congratulations!
Date: 3/30/2016 9:39:00 AM
Great Job B/W, congrats...
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Date: 3/30/2016 3:29:00 PM
Charlie thanks for the congrat
Date: 3/30/2016 8:54:00 AM
Congratulations Broken Wings on your breathtaking win! You are truly a matchless poet! :) -HANS
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Date: 3/30/2016 3:30:00 PM
Hans thanks for the congratulations and the compliment!
Date: 3/30/2016 1:18:00 AM
Wonderful poetry n win Broken.. both poems good.. big congrats!
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Date: 3/30/2016 7:11:00 AM
Upma, thanks for visiting with the wonderful and the congrats !
Date: 3/29/2016 7:50:00 PM
Back to say congratulations, BW, on your placement in the contest. Peace my friend:)
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Date: 3/30/2016 7:44:00 AM
Daniel, thanks for visiting with the congratulations !
Date: 3/29/2016 7:01:00 PM
BW, congrats on your placement in the oops contest!-luloo
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Date: 3/29/2016 7:09:00 PM
Laura, thanks for visiting with the congrats !
Date: 3/29/2016 6:22:00 PM
Ah, BW, the difference three days makes. Poem #1 had the concise, brisk, crispness of a cold walk on fresh snow. Poem #2 carries a more eloquent imagery, a smooth surrender to the silence. Thanks for participating in the contest.
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Date: 3/29/2016 6:56:00 PM
John, thanks for that great exercise in writing, it was so interesting to do and I am honored with my placement !
Date: 3/8/2016 11:02:00 AM
Two wonderful writes, BW. I can't say which I prefer. There are elements in each that stand out to me. The first is more simplistic but that is what gives it its character and totally changes the feel from the second. The first could be a dark ominousness write. The second is fuller and more descriptive with feelings of inner peace and the appreciation of the beauty that surrounds you.
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Date: 3/8/2016 12:09:00 PM
James, I like both also, the second has more detail which flows better for me, thanks for visiting with your opinion, appreciate
Date: 3/6/2016 3:24:00 PM
And snow it goes!
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Date: 3/6/2016 6:07:00 PM
Duke, thanks for visiting my poem, so appreciated !
Date: 3/6/2016 8:14:00 AM
Excellent. Lovely write. Enjoyed reading it. Thanks for sharing it.
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Date: 3/6/2016 6:21:00 PM
Ravi, thanks for visiting with the excellent and lovely !!
Date: 3/6/2016 7:56:00 AM
I'm not taking sides, Constance:) Both versions are lovely and the imagery appeals strongly to my senses. If you were to look back again now, you'd see me walking softly in your footsteps! ~ Regards // paul
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Date: 3/6/2016 7:01:00 PM
Paul, thanks so much for visiting, I sort of like them both also, the second one is more detailed..
Date: 3/5/2016 7:14:00 PM
you did perfectly. The second one IS the better one. VERY nicely done, Constance. I hope I can try this one too.
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Date: 3/5/2016 11:40:00 PM
Andrea, thanks for visiting with the perfectly, no doubt you will do one far better !
Date: 3/5/2016 12:55:00 PM
Reads like a winner..Way to go for the contest..I do like the silence of the snow that is when one can only hear the snow impacting onto the other snow already on the ground..Thanks for the visits to my page..Sara
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Date: 3/5/2016 3:36:00 PM
Sara, thanks for visiting with the nice comment, appreciate !
Date: 3/5/2016 11:10:00 AM
lovely work, constance... well, i really like both, wow!.. huggs
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Date: 3/5/2016 3:48:00 PM
Nette, thanks for visiting with the lovely, and the wow, I sort of like both also, hugs back !
Date: 3/5/2016 10:10:00 AM
Broken Wings, you did such a great job for this contest. You brought your thoughts and emotions so freely into both of them. Superb poem and gl in the contest, you will do very well :)-luloo *smiles*
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Date: 3/5/2016 3:57:00 PM
Laura, thanks for visiting with the nice comment and the superb and smiles, appreciate !!
Date: 3/4/2016 11:05:00 PM
Lovely write Constance, love the 2nd version especially as it brings such good imagery and enhances the picture so well. Have blessed weekend, Gordon
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Date: 3/4/2016 11:08:00 PM
Gordon, thanks for visiting with the lovely and the nice comment, appreciate !
Date: 3/4/2016 6:24:00 PM
I like both versions. I was always one to go with the initial instinct. Capturing the thought at that particular moment but like you I found this exercise refreshing and did notice a complete change in one's point of view. Both beautiful writings, BW. Good luck in the contest. Peace young lady:)
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Date: 3/4/2016 10:48:00 PM
Daniel, thanks for visiting with that great comment, I guess what I saw mostly was that I expanded on the initial poem, sort of gave it more depth, but I often do this anyways, going back to my write maybe several times and editing it, and I find now I am not as much in a rush to write a poem sometimes taking days to accomplish it ~
Date: 3/4/2016 5:12:00 PM
Very well re-written, Constance. You wrote a C grade rough draft and then enhanced it into an A poem. ;)
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Date: 3/4/2016 11:42:00 PM
Lin, thanks for visiting and for the compliment, so appreciated !
Date: 3/4/2016 4:24:00 PM
wow I love the enhanced later write especially the final two lines - great imagery Constance:-) good luck in the contest:-) hugs Jan xx
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Date: 3/4/2016 4:39:00 PM
Jan, thanks for the wow, yes it is amazing what happens when you leave a poem for a few days, I guess you feel it more !

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