Shipwrecked!

Storm rages waves crash my mind conjures thoughts of you and I am shattered

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Judy Konos

Date: 4/24/2015 8:52:00 AM

Oh My...have had boats forever and this brought back storms did not think we would survive in....Lovely Senryu ...best I have ever read...Thank You

Abe Lopez

Date: 2/2/2009 5:00:00 PM

Great senryu, it's one of my favorite forms.............nice

Keith Bickerstaffe

Date: 1/26/2009 9:03:00 PM

I like the assonance and placement of the words 'crash' and 'shattered.' Excellent! Love and hugs, Keith

Sharon Winter

Date: 1/26/2009 5:10:00 AM

Wow. Strong surges of emotion captured in this excellent Senryu. Excellent! Good luck! Love, Shar

Brian Strand

Date: 1/25/2009 11:29:00 PM

Best wishes with this one Robin.Rgds Brian & thanks for your welcome comments

Maryam Jameela Haniff

Date: 1/25/2009 2:07:00 PM

Mysterious way to write about love..but I like it..different is always nicer than same old same old..lol..awesome job!..good luck in the contest!...*Maryam

Date: 1/25/2009 9:06:00 AM

Interesting take on the subject. Fitting title adds creativity to this concise poem. Good luck in the contest. Thank you for your kind comments. Keep on writing! Have a nice day. Karen

Carrie Richards

Date: 1/25/2009 8:37:00 AM

Excellent, so filled with emotion, Robin!! Winning entry, I'm sure! ~ Love, Carrie

Christopher Higgins

Date: 1/25/2009 8:19:00 AM

This makes me sad inside for some reason..maybe its because I am little mush..lol..the second line is sweet but then the third line leaves me wondering..are you shattered because you are not together or are you broken because it ws painful being one with this person..I love this..it can be read a few ways..only you know the answer lady Robin...hope you are smiling my friend. Much love, Chris.