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Sewer of Sadness

Sewer of Sadness Walking in the dark down a hole I fall Slipping in the darkness that consumes me Crashing to the bottom feeling so small Wet sewerness in constant misery She showed me the signs I chose not to see Now in emptiness I long for the chance to start over again in our romance Knowing I will never receive this wish Dreaming of her closeness in one more dance waking up in defecation with fish 05/13/16

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Skat A

Date: 7/12/2016 1:46:00 AM

Awesome win, Brian... skat

Richard Lamoureux

Date: 5/21/2016 5:47:00 AM

Congratulations Brian!

Brian Davey
Date: 5/23/2016 2:45:00 AM

Thank you very much Richard

Joanna Daniel

Date: 5/21/2016 2:37:00 AM

Congratulations on top spot Brian:) The imagery you used is great:)

Brian Davey
Date: 5/21/2016 4:52:00 AM

Thank you I am flattered

Karam Misra

Date: 5/21/2016 12:24:00 AM

Congratulations on your top spot, Brian. Graphic and sad. ~kc~

Brian Davey
Date: 5/21/2016 4:52:00 AM

Thank you Karam

Dineen Williams Gault

Date: 5/20/2016 7:06:00 PM

Your imagery was potent, but when we have no chance with the one we desire, that's how it feels. Quite well done, congratulations!

Brian Davey
Date: 5/21/2016 4:51:00 AM

Thank you so much for your kind words I am pleased that you enjoyed it

Kim Rodrigues

Date: 5/20/2016 3:55:00 PM

Visual of emotions! Congratulations, Brian!

Brian Davey
Date: 5/21/2016 4:50:00 AM

Thank you Kim

Sara Chansarkar

Date: 5/20/2016 3:38:00 PM

Congratulations Brian, this is a heartfelt piece!

Brian Davey
Date: 5/21/2016 4:50:00 AM

Thank you Sara

Sandra Haight

Date: 5/20/2016 3:13:00 PM

Very powerful sadness, Brian. Congratulations on your First Place win. Sandra

Brian Davey
Date: 5/21/2016 4:50:00 AM

I am humbled thank you so much!

Lukas Ficklin

Date: 5/20/2016 3:08:00 PM

Oh to start over again would be grand, huh? The finality of it all is so gripping Brian. Congrats on your win.

Brian Davey
Date: 5/21/2016 4:50:00 AM

thank you so much Lukas

Lu Loo

Date: 5/20/2016 1:09:00 PM

Brian, thank you for being a part of my contest and congrats on your top placement! -luloo :)

Brian Davey
Date: 5/20/2016 2:24:00 PM

Wow thank you so much luloo I am honored at my placement! Another great contest hosted also and I look forward to the next one!

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 5/15/2016 8:57:00 PM

oh my goodness. a horrible image at the end, but goes well with the title of the poem. WEll done for Sad dizain contest. I ended up doing a story out of mine. If I ever get it posted!!

Brian Davey
Date: 5/18/2016 5:49:00 PM

Yah it is quite a nasty image isn't it! Look forward to reading yours (if you ever get it posted)

Mark Peterson

Date: 5/13/2016 9:07:00 PM

Wow, Brian. An in your face kind of poem. I wasn't familiar with the form, but it is intriguing. Allows you to convey the setting of place and feeling rather well.

Brian Davey
Date: 5/14/2016 1:22:00 AM

Thank you mark it is actually the first poem that I have written in this form myself so I am happy to hear that it is well received