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All time and effort lay, all that's best prayed My one last say to be at last safe and paid Though I got strayed and had been left to right swayed All that's best prayed, all time and effort lay Outcasted without trial, dismissed with deep vile Grins taste of bile, nerves a fluttering volt of riles No one to take hold with those futile ill revile Dismissed with deep vile, outcasted without trial They kiss without goodbye to free one last sigh Forgiveness: legion of solitude, don't defy Careful to tell not a lie, speaking with mind's eye To free one last sigh, they kiss without goodbye A hot stupid pride, a dip to cool in a tide With turbulence, I still stride and take the ride Indefinite guide, even nebulous hide A dip to cool in a tide, a hot stupid pride Too scared to give a try, too scared of break and cry Bended knee, juiceless but I don't like to die Tumbling to reach solely the wide ocean sky Too scared of break and cry, too scared to give a try (c) Olive Eloisa 2:15 am June 02, 2014 Contest Name: Scary Moments Sponsor: Shadow Hamilton 5th place, to God be the greatest glory!!

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Date: 3/19/2015 3:58:00 PM
Collective rhyming in poetry, always a challenge, in this poem, achieved. Nice one Olive, hugs//Jamesxxx
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Date: 3/24/2015 7:26:00 AM
Thanks much JAmes. :) hugs too
Date: 6/19/2014 2:52:00 PM
Olive, thank you for the reply
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Date: 6/9/2014 10:08:00 AM
OLIVE, Congrats on your Scary moment win. Thanks for sharing........Love Linda
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Date: 6/17/2014 12:04:00 PM
:) thank you LInda.. :D
Date: 6/6/2014 6:03:00 PM
Congratulations on your win. Love, Joyce
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Date: 6/9/2014 6:38:00 AM
Thank you Joyce.. :D God bless you.. :)
Date: 6/6/2014 3:44:00 PM
Hey you did real well with this! I loved the rhyme, the words you used you don't see in everyday speech, but they rolled flawless off your tongue (or pen). Lots of hugs my friend :)
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Date: 6/8/2014 1:12:00 PM
Thanks Casarah..:) this actually my first try with this form..:) your comments so sweet. Hugs
Date: 6/5/2014 10:30:00 AM
super rhyme Olive congrats on place ty for taking part hugs
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Date: 6/8/2014 1:05:00 PM
Thank you Shadow..:) it's my pleasure to do this.. I wasn't that sure if it will fit your theme but as I read the comments I think it did..:) God bless you more
Date: 6/5/2014 9:51:00 AM
You did very well with this poem Olive_eloi! Once again your flair for rhyme is seen here. Congrats on your win; it is a deserved one. (tea or coffee?) // paul
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Date: 6/8/2014 12:58:00 PM
Coffee please..:D and doughnuts... Weee You know Paul that This my first try with this kind and am really not so sure that it will turn ok but wow it didn't expect this..:) to God be the greater glory..:)
Date: 6/5/2014 9:50:00 AM
Congratulations on a fine win in the contest, olive
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Date: 6/8/2014 1:03:00 PM
Thanks dr. Ram..:) GBU
Date: 6/3/2014 10:19:00 PM
Olive; this is really good. You really put the rhyme in there. Scary moments, we all have. Take care and God bless you.... Lucilla
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Date: 6/8/2014 12:59:00 PM
Thank you sweet Lucy... :) GBU
Date: 6/3/2014 4:51:00 PM
Very nice rhyme scheme Olive....nicely penned
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Date: 6/8/2014 12:56:00 PM
Thank you Joseph..:) GBU
Date: 6/3/2014 1:57:00 AM
I really love the rhyme in this. You did an amazing job on that alone.... The rest of the poem was so well expressed, the reader can really feel the fear in your words.... All in all, a really great write, Olive! Good luck in Shadow's contest!
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Date: 6/8/2014 12:55:00 PM
Thank you Kelly..:) your comments are appreciated much as they inspire me more..:) this a hurry write in a way..:)
Date: 6/2/2014 1:33:00 PM
I love the way this flows, great write :D
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Date: 6/3/2014 7:05:00 AM
Thank you for your flow of comment A. E. :) GBU
Date: 6/2/2014 1:09:00 PM
we are somehow afraid to show our vulnerable side, eloi... love the deep mood of this one.. congrats on your wins.. i was waiting for your first 2 linesto rhymes in my past contest.. still, a beauty.. huggs
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Date: 6/3/2014 7:04:00 AM
oh!!!! i tried to changed it Nette... :( I was actually again lil disappointed of myself of not reading and understanding the instructions as it deals with bridges... :O i re reviewed and there I found my mistake... Thank you for your comments Nette.. they are so much.. :) GBU..
Date: 6/2/2014 11:58:00 AM
Olive an excellent write, the internal rhymes are very good....David
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Date: 6/3/2014 7:02:00 AM
Thank you David. :) I appreciate you comment much.. :)
Date: 6/2/2014 11:52:00 AM
Love this one, and I'm with Jan on the interesting way you made things rhyme. One thing about it, you definitely got your point across in a superb way. Thoroughly enjoyed reading this.
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Date: 6/3/2014 6:57:00 AM
Thank You Jerry.. I am trying to concentrate on just one moment here however, as im writing this flowed.. :) Thanks..
Date: 6/2/2014 9:10:00 AM
wonderful flowing verse really enjoyed the way it flowed so smoothly and the clever way it rhymed, hugs Jan xxxx
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Date: 6/3/2014 6:40:00 AM
Thank you Jan.. :) I appreciate that.. :) hugs and hugs.. :) your comments are kind as your heart.. :)
Date: 6/1/2014 9:02:00 PM
I liked the last lines of each stanza. They seemed to be like summaries of each stanza and gave cohesion to your poem, Olive.
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Date: 6/3/2014 6:39:00 AM
Thank you Andrea.. :) I appreciate your comment.. :) GBU
Date: 6/1/2014 7:07:00 PM
This is wonderfully written Olive, This reminds me of roller coasters!! :)
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Date: 6/3/2014 4:14:00 AM
:D it's thrilling, exciting and scary but all in all adventurous ride Arthur.. :D thanks much for the drop by... :) GBU

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