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Sadness Weeps Contest Four Lines

Buried deep I can not breath this black abyss no light I see Muddy dirt surrounds me in a bottomless pit so endless and extreme Please! No more rain or I will further sink into this rayless ground no hand to grab I scream 'Oh' the worms of gore as birds sit plucking for more! T Reams 9/19/2015 Contest sponsored by: Broken Wings 'Four Lines' * Placed 2nd*

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Michael Tor

Date: 9/28/2015 11:07:00 PM

Tammy excellent win!

Tammy Reams
Date: 9/29/2015 6:12:00 PM

Thank you very much Michael!

Skat A

Date: 9/28/2015 9:53:00 PM

Hi Tammy, Congratulations on your Four Line win. Forever **SKAT**

Tammy Reams
Date: 9/29/2015 6:11:00 PM

Thank you very much for the nice comment Skat! Have a great day.

Laura Leiser

Date: 9/28/2015 12:15:00 AM

Congrats on your chilling, winning poem, Tammi!

Tammy Reams
Date: 9/28/2015 3:44:00 PM

Thank you Laura for the nice comment.

Jan Allison

Date: 9/26/2015 5:31:00 PM

Dropping back with my congrats Tammy:-) hugs Jan xx

Tammy Reams
Date: 9/27/2015 8:32:00 AM

Thanks Jan! Hugs back to you!

Dr. Upma A. Sharma

Date: 9/24/2015 11:37:00 PM

Ah such a wonderful write Tammy, love the last line the most! Congrats on big win!

Tammy Reams
Date: 9/26/2015 7:21:00 AM

Thank you Dr. Upma for the great comment!

John Lawless

Date: 9/24/2015 8:57:00 PM

Gruesomely dark and gory. All it needs is Alfred Hitchcock saying "Good Evening" as only he could..congrats no the win

Tammy Reams
Date: 9/26/2015 7:20:00 AM

Thank you John for the great comment! Alfred Hitchcock was one of my favorites!

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 9/24/2015 3:25:00 PM

not just dark and deep but also gross. Which is GOOD!! (I just hate the thought of worms around me, so that makes a very vivid picture.) Big congrats for your big win.

Tammy Reams
Date: 9/26/2015 7:19:00 AM

Thank you for the great comment Andrea!

Alexis Y.

Date: 9/23/2015 8:46:00 PM

Tammy, congratulations on your win:-) Alexis

Tammy Reams
Date: 9/26/2015 7:18:00 AM

Thank you for the comment Alexis!

Casarah Nance

Date: 9/23/2015 6:41:00 PM

worms of gore as birds sit plucking for more....oohh nice...great lil write and awesome win!

Tammy Reams
Date: 9/23/2015 7:20:00 PM

Thank you so much for the great comment Casarah!

Eve Roper

Date: 9/23/2015 6:02:00 PM

Congratulations on your win, Tammy. Hugs Eve

Tammy Reams
Date: 9/23/2015 7:20:00 PM

Thank you so much for the great comment Eve! Hugs back to you!

James Inman

Date: 9/23/2015 10:48:00 AM

Love it! So emotional.

Tammy Reams
Date: 9/23/2015 7:19:00 PM

Thank you very much for the nice comment James!

Paul Callus

Date: 9/20/2015 3:44:00 AM

Metaphorically powerful, Tammy! Impressive transmission of deep emotions and extreme helplessness. #7 // paul

Tammy Reams
Date: 9/20/2015 8:00:00 AM

Thank you very much Paul!!!! Have a great day.

Emile Pinet

Date: 9/19/2015 1:35:00 PM

You describe your experience perfectly and it takes shape in my mind’s eye. Emile.

Tammy Reams
Date: 9/19/2015 5:42:00 PM

Thank you so much for the nice comment Emile!

Miraj Raha

Date: 9/19/2015 9:28:00 AM

great reflection about sadness,those four lines were very powerful I must say,they express the helplessness of the reader.

Tammy Reams
Date: 9/19/2015 5:41:00 PM

Thank you so much for the wonderful comment Miraj!

John Lawless

Date: 9/19/2015 9:20:00 AM

this is dark, deep, yucky, icky and one hellova metaphor so many situations.....

Tammy Reams
Date: 9/19/2015 5:41:00 PM

Thank you so much for the great comment John on the metaphor! I have been doing a lot of poetry reading on this so I can advance in a better degree in my poetry.

Jan Allison

Date: 9/19/2015 9:10:00 AM

ooh this is dark and deep Tammy good luck in the contest:-) hugs jan xx

Tammy Reams
Date: 9/19/2015 5:39:00 PM

Thank you Jan for the very nice comment. Hugs back to you.