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Rising From the Sea

From out of the mist he traveled alone, rising up from the sea. A patch on his eye a hook for a hand, he came to set the pirates free. Sure they pilaged, burnt down part of the town, for a pirate must be who he be. Freedom and gold coins treasures and maps, to be raised up from the sea. In the mist their mistress waits for them, a ship called Serenity. She needs her crew to sail the seven seas, a woman of grand mystery. They joined with her, so very long ago, their mistress of the sea. she beckoned them all, they must return, without pirates who would she be? Her journey would end here in this harbor, her voyage of insanity. The Captain charged to complete his task, rising up with power from the sea! The Captain so brave he approached the town, he said "ye better be listenen to me. There is somethin I'll be tellin ya all, you're goin to want to be settin me boys free. Or haunted you'll be all a yer days, A serpent will rise up from the sea." "For the ship she be our only master, our mistress of the sea." "She will not let you lock her men away. be persuaded to listen to me." "I truthfuly speak to one and all, the ship can be a cruel enemy!" The townsfolk release all the pirates, once again they all be free. Back home with their mistress, the mysterious Serenity. Ist attempt at a ballad.

Copyright © | Year Posted 2013




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Date: 11/24/2013 11:10:00 AM
Richard, ... CONGRATULATIONS:) on having your poem featured on the soups HOME PAGE. Enjoy the new coming week, and Thanksgiving Holiday.. Always a poet friend <3 =LINDA
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Richard Lamoureux
Date: 11/24/2013 7:33:00 PM
Thanks Linda.
Date: 11/22/2013 11:47:00 AM
Richard, , Congratulations on having your poem Featured this week. Loving ~SKAT~
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Richard Lamoureux
Date: 11/24/2013 7:34:00 PM
Hii SKAT, thanks for the visit.
Date: 10/18/2013 5:23:00 PM
Enjoyed reading your 1st ballad Richard, Plenty of livley discriptive content here..'
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Richard Lamoureux
Date: 10/18/2013 5:36:00 PM
Thanks Joe.
Date: 10/12/2013 8:42:00 PM
Really a great tale Richard...beautifuly written...
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Richard Lamoureux
Date: 10/12/2013 11:50:00 PM
Thanks Donna, I am pleased you enjoyed it.
Date: 10/12/2013 1:18:00 PM
Arrrr, me matey be pennin' th' booty-ful tale of 'em seafarin' folk. Very, very good for a first attempt, Richard. You rock!! Licia :-)
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Richard Lamoureux
Date: 10/12/2013 1:24:00 PM
Thanks Licia, any feedback on this form would be appreciated. I'm not sure If I got it right.
Date: 10/12/2013 9:07:00 AM
I see you made some changes....It gives it a better and smoother flow....Nice work, Richard
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Richard Lamoureux
Date: 10/12/2013 9:36:00 AM
Thanks Eileen, I tried to get the basic idea in place and then went back to polish it. I'm not sure if I got it right but It was fun to give it a go.
Date: 10/12/2013 8:55:00 AM
Arrrgh Richard I be relatin to all yer words lad, bein a seafarin sot meself, great mastery of the quill matey, Carl
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Richard Lamoureux
Date: 10/12/2013 9:34:00 AM
I be drawn to the sea meself matee. Thanks for commenting Carl.
Date: 10/12/2013 7:30:00 AM
For a first attempt, it is absolutely wonderful! As I was reading, I could imagine hearing it sung by Gordon Lightfoot. A master storyteller you are.
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Richard Lamoureux
Date: 10/12/2013 8:28:00 AM
Thanks Monterey,this was a difficult one to write.
Date: 10/12/2013 6:22:00 AM
hi Richard I love this great flow and structure I can see your pirate love it Shadow x smile
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Richard Lamoureux
Date: 10/12/2013 8:29:00 AM
Thanks so much Shadow. As,ile back to you.
Date: 10/12/2013 3:39:00 AM
Well Richard my friend, for a first attempt, you didn't do too bad...As a matter of fact, you did great!...I have looked at this form before and understand how very difficult it is to write...I have always been fascinated with the legends of pirates and I LOVE the name you gave to their ship...Good stuff! - Tim
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Richard Lamoureux
Date: 10/12/2013 8:30:00 AM
Your comment has made my day timm, thanks!

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