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Ring Around the Moon

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Ring Around the Moon

The moon rose, bloodied and bruised tonight, above.
As if she'd been to battle with a false love.
Behind a clotted cloud she was espied hiding
with lashes splayed of colored lights colliding

A Miss sorely bruised beyond endurance
impounded orb, held aloft, her glance entranced.
A warning beacon blazing to ward sea
in haste does each sailor find island lea.

So ringed, the married moon appears a warning
each man on land or sea shall fear the storm
for hidden horrors lay behind the tune
that falsely cheerful ring around the moon.

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  1. Date: 2/9/2012 11:35:00 PM
    Congrats on your win, Debbie! Wonderful imagery. I love the last stanza. Blessings, Rhonda

  1. Date: 2/9/2012 12:54:00 PM
    The more I read it the less I like it..the meter is stumbling all over and disconcertingly, I can usually do 4 feet of iambic trying to do 5 really threw me OFF! Sorry ..

  1. Date: 2/9/2012 7:46:00 AM
    Great ending with hidden horrors and falsely cheerful ring! Who knew? Good thing I wasn't a sailor!

  1. Date: 2/9/2012 5:48:00 AM
    I enjoyed the supernatural feel of this one, and those lovely rhymes, interesting form, I shall have to go takea peek at the definition. Enjoyed.

  1. Date: 2/8/2012 4:04:00 PM
    Hmmm, Why shouldn't the moon get equal gender billing---especially when it's temperamental!! Easy,easy, just kidding. Love the heroic couplet form because it seems to pull you in, and this is awesome imagery to be pulled into. Also, I am a sailor and have sought the leeward side of an island many times because fools seldom get to boast. Thank You for your kind comments. BTW Hope your day went for the very best. Concerned...

  1. Date: 2/7/2012 10:01:00 PM
    Very enjoyable Debbie. Congratulations on your win

  1. Date: 2/7/2012 7:00:00 PM
    intriguing lines ..very profound thoughts.. mesmerizing lines so interesting in style and imagery Debbie.. thankxx so much for my win in your last contest.. Withered Rose is a commemoration of my Daddy who died this day many years ago.. so appreciate the recognition..luv..

  1. Date: 2/6/2012 3:32:00 PM
    Made me think of the Hymn Those in peryl on the sea , enjoyed very much Debbie , Hugs , Declan xx

  1. Date: 2/6/2012 3:31:00 PM
    This was a beautifull poem Debbie, thank you for sharing! oxox hugs Laila

  1. Date: 2/6/2012 3:24:00 PM
    I thought that a ring around the moon meant: Tomorrow comes the snow. It is a beautiful poem Debbie. - oxox love Anne-Lise