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Rhymed Haiku

humble bumble bee brings pollen from apple tree to make his honey he feeds his loved queen to protect her he gets mean his stings aren’t funny a hive is his home he fills it with honeycomb for love not money For Carol Brown's "What's the Buzz" contest Carol gave me a no. 1

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Kash Poet

Date: 3/11/2011 7:45:00 AM

Amazing haiku here Joyce!Congrats on your 1st place win!--kashinath

Sara Kendrick

Date: 3/10/2011 3:47:00 PM

Congratulations on your win..Sara

John Freeman

Date: 3/10/2011 10:08:00 AM

A pleasure dear one to see you again at the top Joyce. Congratulations on your worthy first place win. Agape, Moses

Wilma Neels

Date: 3/10/2011 9:59:00 AM

Seriously top notch Joyce, congratulations on your awesome win, hope your server problems are sorted now ;) love Wilma

Carolyn Devonshire

Date: 3/10/2011 9:10:00 AM

So delighted to see your poem nabbing a first-place win, Joyce. Well deserved! Congratulations. Love, Carolyn

Elaine George

Date: 3/10/2011 8:48:00 AM

Sensational Nature Haiku, Joyce. Top-notch. Many congrat's on your BIG WIN. Lainie

Carol Sunshine Brown

Date: 3/10/2011 6:05:00 AM

Congratulations on the win in my contest Joyce. Thank you for supporting my contest and my decision to run my contest my way. Love, Carol

Tahera Mannan

Date: 3/10/2011 12:02:00 AM

Yes it is love on the bee's side but money for humans. Lovely. many congrats dear friend.

Robb A. Kopp

Date: 3/9/2011 8:24:00 PM

now thats fun joyce!congrats

Barbara Gorelick

Date: 3/9/2011 7:53:00 PM

Congrats on your big win..dont you just love the little bees....BG

Robert A. Dufresne

Date: 3/9/2011 4:49:00 PM

for love not money ...cool poem Joyce.. tying it all in and rhyming to boot. nniiicce! Congrats to you and thanks for your comment. Yes it is really a beautiful sight.. wish I could share it with all.

Hgarvey Daniel Esquire

Date: 3/9/2011 4:30:00 PM

Dear " MOM ", Congratulations on YOUR well deserved No. 1 Win in Carol Brown's "Contest" "What's the Buzz"a Find Buzzing POEM Enjoy YOUR Magnificent Honor LOVE ALWAYS, YOUR Liege...Harry

Carrie Richards

Date: 3/9/2011 3:35:00 PM

Love the last line....so cute!! :) Congratulations on your number 1 !!

Debbie Guzzi

Date: 3/9/2011 2:44:00 PM

;) LOL the end word of each verse rhyming also IS very clever!!! Congrad's Light & Love

Nette Onclaud

Date: 3/9/2011 2:28:00 PM

i love the whole piece, joyce!! and having multiple placements for 1st pllace is soo interesting ... CONGRATS!! :) huggs, nette

Linda-Marie Sweetheart

Date: 3/9/2011 2:15:00 PM

Congrats Joyce on your first place win in Carol's contest with this thrilling and exhilarating entry my friend.. most well deserved win my friend..enjoy..luv..

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 3/9/2011 1:51:00 PM

SWEET as honey, sweetie! Congrats on your well deserved win!

Dr.Ram Mehta

Date: 3/9/2011 1:44:00 PM

Congratulations on the first place win in the contest of Carol, Joyce

Constance La France

Date: 2/28/2011 10:04:00 PM

"amazing" and wonderful, so creative, I love it~~

Christopher Marcum

Date: 2/28/2011 9:22:00 PM

smile -- i was just viewing a few paintings in verse and came upon this beautiful canvas then started to continue on but, its is sooo very lovely that i had to return and com its honeycombs sweetness ~ i love the duel image i find paralleling nature and life; love and devotion ~ "A Fave In, 'Brilliant & Beautiful'" ~ love, Always, christopher ~

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 2/28/2011 9:05:00 PM

this is sweet and why not, it's all about the honey!! Love that last one with the honeycomb, Joyce. I just know this is going to do super well.

Carolyn Devonshire

Date: 2/28/2011 8:41:00 PM

Very nice rhyme scheme, Joyce, and I love the way you wrote about bees for "What's the Buzz." You had me smiling all the way through. Really like the internal rhyme in the "humble bumble" bee, too. Wishing you success, Joyce! Can't wait to get home Wednesday. Love, Carolyn

Robert Pettit

Date: 2/28/2011 7:54:00 PM

Each time I see "What's the Buzz", the Webber-Rice musical "Jesus Christ Superstar" comes to my mind. These three haiku should be admired by Carol.