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Revenge of the Green Eyed Monster For Contest

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I am a real life green-eyed monster For I was born with green eyes I try to keep the monster at bay But sometimes she rears her ugly head It’s something I’ll always have to live with My first memory of the monster appearing… Well I guess I was about five years old Mum would give us our pocket money You were older than me so you got more ALL it meant was you could buy more sweets than me I would watch you devour each one You never thought of sharing them But you’ve had weight issues all your life Whereas I’m a petite size eight…. I wonder who is jealous now! Contest - Jealousy Sponsor – SKAT 09~08~15

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Michael Tor

Date: 9/17/2015 7:14:00 PM

Jan great win. Congratulation

Jan Allison
Date: 9/18/2015 8:31:00 AM

Thanks so much Michael:-) Hugs Jan xx

Nette Onclaud

Date: 9/17/2015 2:50:00 AM

better late than never.. greeat write on jealousy, jan.. my hours are so limited this week!.. congrats on your win!.. huggs

Jan Allison
Date: 9/18/2015 8:32:00 AM

I'm struggling to even get on soup at the moment :-( hugs jan xx

Alexis Y.

Date: 9/16/2015 5:01:00 PM

Jan, congratulations on your win:-) Alexis

Jan Allison
Date: 9/18/2015 8:31:00 AM

Thanks so much Alexis:-) Hugs Jan xx

Dr. Upma A. Sharma

Date: 9/15/2015 11:57:00 PM

Wonderful write on jealousy Jan n a great win! Big congrats!

Jan Allison
Date: 9/16/2015 2:51:00 AM

Thanks Dr Sharma:-) hugs jan xx

Skat A

Date: 9/15/2015 11:21:00 PM

Jan, congratulations on your win. Thank you for the support. Love SKAT

Jan Allison
Date: 9/16/2015 2:51:00 AM

Thanks Skat I look forward to reading the winning poems:-) hugs jan x

James Fraser

Date: 9/14/2015 2:12:00 PM

So many will have lived your words Jan, and what moods and attitudes there would have been, hugs//James xx

Jan Allison
Date: 9/14/2015 2:20:00 PM

I am sure other's can relate to what I felt James but in the long run it hasn't done me any harm:-) hugs jan xx

Pandita Sietesantos

Date: 9/11/2015 10:24:00 PM

AAAAH! Revenge is a dish served cold and yours is sweeeet! Wonderfully creative and I enjoyed the irony! Touche, my friend! This is another winner! Pandita

Jan Allison
Date: 9/12/2015 6:21:00 AM

I had fun with this Pandita:-) hugs Jan xx

Njeri Hunjeri

Date: 9/10/2015 5:04:00 PM

This is a great revenge write. Jealousy with its monstrous claws digging deep as time passes. All the best Jan

Jan Allison
Date: 9/10/2015 5:08:00 PM

Thanks Njeri:-) I had fun with this contest:-) hugs jan xx

Anu Nayak

Date: 9/10/2015 5:52:00 AM

Dear Jan, hahaha.....nice twist at the end of poem....sweet jealousy....good luck in the contest dear.loved it!...love, Anu:-)

Jan Allison
Date: 9/10/2015 6:22:00 AM

Thanks for dropping by Anu:-) hugs Jan xx

Olive Eloisa Guillermo - Fraser

Date: 9/10/2015 1:10:00 AM

The twist in the end makes this lil poem strong! Nice one Jan.. ~Olive ELoisa =")

Jan Allison
Date: 9/10/2015 6:21:00 AM

Thanks Olive:-) hugs Jan xx

James Inman

Date: 9/9/2015 8:00:00 PM

Oh, sweet revenge. Is this really the sweet Jan I've come too know.

Jan Allison
Date: 9/10/2015 6:21:00 AM

Yes its really me lol:-) hugs jan xx

Eileen Manassian

Date: 9/9/2015 6:29:00 PM

Hey, sweetie...You sure know how to get your own. This is a clever write, but then again....you are one smart cookie...Oh...the diet kind of cook....with....no calories...AS IF!!! Love ya.

Jan Allison
Date: 9/10/2015 6:20:00 AM

I love to write with a twist and the end result makes me smile LOL:-) hugs Jan xx

Afolabi Muideen

Date: 9/9/2015 5:22:00 PM

I love the imagery of this one and the funny revenge within.... A well written piece. Would like to see your comment at my page "eve moon". Good luck in the contest..........A.M.

Jan Allison
Date: 9/9/2015 5:50:00 PM

Will pop over afolabi:-) thanks for dropping by:-) hugs jan xx

Nette Onclaud

Date: 9/9/2015 4:02:00 PM

yeahhh... i really get this greeat write, jan... who is really the envious one?.. love it.. by the way, my american size is small or 4-6, english size---18, lol... huggs!

Jan Allison
Date: 9/9/2015 5:50:00 PM

Gosh size 4 - 6 is tiny:-) hugs jan xx

Catherine Labeau

Date: 9/9/2015 2:52:00 PM

size 4 and sometime 2 depend on the store salvation army a bounty in the children section

Jan Allison
Date: 9/9/2015 5:49:00 PM

I'm not that small lol:-) hugs jan xx

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 9/8/2015 11:44:00 PM

hahaha. SWEET revenge!! This is one SHWEET POEM!! I think Skat will love it.

Jan Allison
Date: 9/9/2015 1:16:00 AM

It sure is sweet revenge Andrea lol - as you know I have no issues with my weight:-) hugs jan xx

Duke Beaufort

Date: 9/8/2015 6:32:00 PM

Oh my goodness. Revenge happens eventually. That is just too funny!!!

Jan Allison
Date: 9/9/2015 1:14:00 AM

This was written totally from real life Duke and I am better off for the experience although at the time it happened it wasn't nice lol:-) hugs jan xx

Jaycee Cervenka

Date: 9/8/2015 5:45:00 PM

Karma is a B is it not? Love the ending here, the scathing tone works well for your topic. ~janet

Jan Allison
Date: 9/8/2015 5:47:00 PM

Thanks Janet it's written from the heart! :-) hugs jan xx

Tim Smith

Date: 9/8/2015 12:12:00 PM

lol...the circle of life...sometimes less is more

Jan Allison
Date: 9/8/2015 2:23:00 PM

In this case definitely Tim lol:-) hugs jan xx

Constance La France

Date: 9/8/2015 11:37:00 AM

Jan, your poem is so "C H A R M I N G'' and so real, best of luck in the contest and thanks for visiting, but she loved another ~~

Jan Allison
Date: 9/8/2015 11:59:00 AM

Thanks so much Broken Wings - it is written from personal experience too as many of my poems are:-) hugs Jan xx

Ravi Sathasivam

Date: 9/8/2015 8:48:00 AM

Excellent. Well penned. All the best for the contest. Thanks for sharing it.

Jan Allison
Date: 9/8/2015 11:25:00 AM

Thanks so much Ravi:-) hugs Jan xx

Sandra Haight

Date: 9/8/2015 8:42:00 AM

Love this, Jan - especially the last three lines! All the best for the contest...I predict it will do very well! Hugs, Sandra

Jan Allison
Date: 9/8/2015 11:25:00 AM

Thanks Sandra - I don't think my mother ever understood why I felt so envious of my sister being able to buy more sweets than me - but in hindsight I was very lucky!:-) hugs jan xx

Michael Tor

Date: 9/8/2015 8:39:00 AM

Great ending. Good luck on contest Jan.

Jan Allison
Date: 9/8/2015 11:24:00 AM

Thanks Michael:-) hugs jan xx

Casarah Nance

Date: 9/8/2015 7:35:00 AM

that is like sweet revenge.. hugs

Jan Allison
Date: 9/8/2015 7:36:00 AM

LOL it sure is Cas:-) hugs Jan xx