Repairing the Heart

destructive despair calls in deluges of tear drops... love’s sluice gate opens. © Harry J Horsman 2012

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Keith Bickerstaffe

Date: 5/8/2012 11:05:00 AM

I like your 'd' alliteration in the first two lines, and the assonance of 'deluges' and 'sluice.' Great 575 composition and flow. Well done Harry! Best wishes, Keith

Kabuteng P.Ink K.

Date: 5/1/2012 10:45:00 AM

Sometimes tears can definitely be so soothing and heal--really like the metaphor you have here harry-- enjoyed reading your senryu -- I hope all is well with you :D

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 4/26/2012 3:25:00 PM

hey, I thought I'd responded to this one but don't see myself down below. anyway, I enjoyed this one alot. And hmmm, maybe my green eyes are fading too! I seem to remember mine were a bit brighter once upon a time too!!

Bl Devnath

Date: 4/25/2012 9:36:00 AM

It's genius.The whole poem in the form of haiku presents itself with such golden words that no where it missed its target, I do feel. Loved always, bl

John Freeman

Date: 4/24/2012 11:26:00 AM

Quite unique, Harry! If broken hearts would only return to the true self Sacred, all teardrops would be quenched! Beautiful Love! When the Agape gets sloppy it is bound to break Love's heart. Agape, Moses

Laura Breidenthal

Date: 4/23/2012 6:23:00 PM

What an interesting picture this poem summons! I absolutely loved this awesome Senryu - very nicely done. :) Always, Laura

Michelle Mac Donald

Date: 4/23/2012 12:55:00 PM

This one's a beauty, Harry! You are so wise with such soulful depth. Love this! Best wishes, Mikki (I'm still steaming at those 'mothers', while thinking of it, I looked outside at a bluejay in the tree. It turned it's back and lifted up its tail..hehe