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Refuge

I find myself in the middle of an ocean Lighting, rain and waves crashing No land in sight No refuge in sight No beacon to point me home I struggle to stay afloat The water so cold and black How did I get here? Where do I go? What can I do? Frantically I search I look all around But there’s nowhere to turn I shout with all I have But there’s no one to hear The storm is relentless The waves continue to roll and splash Trying to shove me under I can taste the saltiness of the water As a wave catches me Slaps me in the face The water burning my eyes Blurring my vision Making me panic Making me want to fight harder To keep my head above water But my legs are growing weary My arms are starting to tire out My feet are like cement My breath ragged and fatigued As the rain beats down I cry out again in desperation As I start to sink Down to a watery grave Into the depths below The water so icy and wet In my mouth Down my throat Burning in my lungs Fully submerged now I look up at the surface And I see hope I see refuge I see a hand Reaching down to me Tightly grasping me Pulling me against the force That’s pulling me under My head breaks the surface My eyes open wide As I gulp in the air Pulled free and rescued Not a moment too soon Not a moment too late

Copyright © | Year Posted 2011




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Date: 4/10/2012 6:15:00 AM
Congratulations on your well deserved placement in Gautami's contest Shauna. Love, Carol
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Date: 4/6/2012 6:28:00 PM
GREAT description of near death by drowning. I really liked this. Congrats on your win.
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Date: 4/6/2012 5:04:00 AM
Congratulations Shauna on your win xx
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Date: 4/6/2012 1:40:00 AM
congrats Shauna on a wonderful write and super win for a grand entry luv.. happy easteer blessings too..
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Date: 4/5/2012 4:23:00 PM
Excellent creative work, loved it! Many Congratulations on your win and thank you so much for supporting my contest. love, gautami
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Date: 3/18/2011 9:14:00 AM
I'm glad I was finally looking thru this list so I could find this poem of yours, Constance. This is quite a vivid portrayal of someone nearly dying. You are such a descriptive writer!
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Date: 3/17/2011 7:51:00 AM
I'm so glad that hand was extended to save you. A powerful write! Congratulations on your success in the contest. Love, Carolyn
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Date: 3/17/2011 7:36:00 AM
Congratulations on your win in the "Maverick Free Verse" contest sponsored by John Moses Freeman. Love, Carol
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Date: 3/16/2011 8:50:00 PM
Congrats on your fantastic win in the Maverick Free Verse contest with this exciting entry luv.. enjoy your sweet success...
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Date: 3/16/2011 6:29:00 PM
Congratulations on the win in the contest of John, RRR
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Date: 3/16/2011 6:26:00 PM
So great to see you in the winning circle A Rambling. Congratulations on your worthy poem's success. Agape, Moses
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Date: 3/5/2011 12:50:00 PM
Wonderful poem which can be interpreted to mean so many differnt things.
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Date: 2/22/2011 6:13:00 PM
In rather simple words, you have placed the reader in a scary vicarious situation. Because of your shorter lines, this was not laborous to read. Impressive entry.
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Date: 2/21/2011 5:58:00 PM
what an exciting narrative. jhl
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Date: 2/17/2011 11:26:00 AM
have read this piece, keep looking for the inspiration, i think although you are hitting some good lines you need to be more concise, i look forward to hearing more from you.
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