Red Sun

Blazing red sun over the horizon, Rising silently in the Far East. Splashing beautiful colours across the sky, Awakening Passion inside me. CONTEST: RED SUN SPONSOR: RUSSELL SIVEY

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John Posey

Date: 6/24/2013 7:04:00 PM

Nice imagery, my friend.... Jake

Sasha Maharaj
Date: 7/1/2013 2:50:00 AM

Many Thanks John :)

Kash Poet

Date: 6/24/2013 6:31:00 AM

Beautiful picture you have penned here.Just check the syllable scheme of a Dodoitsu.I am afraid your poem has problem with syllable count.

Sasha Maharaj
Date: 6/24/2013 6:40:00 AM

Many Thanks Mr Kash.... yes i have done that and also viewed examples and noticed that the syllable count was almost similar to mine. i could be wrong though. but thank you so much for the encouragement

Abdulhafeez Oyewole

Date: 6/24/2013 3:01:00 AM

You've penned it well Sasha. Well done and good luck. AO

Sasha Maharaj
Date: 6/24/2013 3:05:00 AM

Thank You so much :)

David De La Croes

Date: 6/24/2013 12:50:00 AM

I love your colourful interpretation of the red sun and its effect on you, Sasha. Best of luck in the competition... David

Sasha Maharaj
Date: 6/24/2013 3:04:00 AM

Many Thanks.. Was just a try.... First time writing this style :)